User blog comment:Maudie Thropple/Of Otters,Pirates, and War!/@comment-1738724-20101217044730

I'll just be repeating what Segalia said, but I'll just say it again.

You really need to sort out paragraphs, and make a new paragraph(I press 'Enter' twice) every time a new character speaks. Capitalisation is pretty good. You need to put punctuation, and you need to work on some of your spellings. I think I'll stop, in case all this information makes your head explode. :)

Oh and before I forget...GET RID OF THE BOXES! BOXES DESERVE TO DIE!! Okay, now I'm sorted. You know what causes boxes, yes?

Okay, now commenting on the story. Its a bit of a mystery why there are ten season old otters on aboard as a crew, and there's a mole pirate...! And there's a super duper humongous parrot that sits on Gurrsum's shoulder even though its twice her size...well, its quite interesting! KIC!