User blog comment:Thaila Juskarath Taggerung/A Taggerung's Journey/@comment-1270315-20090915202719

quote:For a first fanfic, good start but my advice is to rewrite it and break it up into chapters, like her leaving the tribe and meeting up with Corella as one chapter, the playing around, journey to Redwall, and meeting with Skipper and his crew as another, and her adjustment to life at Redwall as another. unquote. dont toatly rewrite it, just change it a little here and there. You can realy change it after you finsh it.