User blog comment:Llamao/Vaheenra Longfletch: Book One/@comment-1427879-20110326154348

There are a few spelling mistakes like Laria mentioned.

Your description and poetry is pretty good. Leila looks like a little rascal. The Wraith seems to be a tricky ambitious beast. Where in the timeline is this? The section in Chapter 3, the first one in Salamandastron is almost identical to Lord Brocktree. Smart badger, killing them off one by one, terrifying them then turning themselves on each other. The section in Chapter 4 with Jenkus reminds me of Doomwyte. The badger and Nadezca reminds me of Swartt and Sunflash. I agree with Laria about Trindle. Some parts are confusing...if you want solid critique: use spell-check, try to make some parts clearer and use your own ideas, don't purloin them directly from BJ. Besides that, KIU!