User blog comment:Astar Goldenwing/For Freedom/@comment-1427879-20120530163250

There were several mistakes, more towards the beginning, but overal quite good for someone whose first language is not English. I liked how you had lots of characters from Loamhedge and Triss, combining old and new. It's hard to believe that the vermin already captured that much land but I liked most of their interaction. One part made it seem like they had already captured Redwall when the rest of the fanfic is about trying to capture it so you might want to fix that. I liked how Simon wasn't happy about Bloodwrath; it showed a different side to him. I can't believe Sagaxus was killed...as well as really sad it feels unlikely. Chestnut annoys me as does the shrew left at Redwall. I had a feeling Trenton was going to betray them and I was right! I liked One-ear and the lieutenant. Anyway, good job and KIU! I want to be updated.