User blog comment:Salamandastron boy/chapter one capn sapwood Gortad the poisener/@comment-1988904-20100608005256

A nice beginning. Is Captain Sapwood the same Sapwood character from Salamandastron?...

Some things to note back your first chapter in terms of formatting and editing and such:


 * I'm not sure if you wrote this all in the editing block of whatever, but sometimes it's handy to write out the story on Word before, glance through a couple times to proofread and then post it up. That way you'll make less spelling mistakes which takes away from the quality of it.
 * You don't need to indent or add extra spaces. if you do your text will be put into a box.

I'm in a box ;-(


 * A little more description might not go amiss. I liked how you described Gortad comparing him to other creatures -- ublaz, russano and buckler -- so this takes place after the Sable Quean?  How does Gortrad know about Russano and buckler, or ublaz for that matter?
 * Keep an eye on your spacing between sentences and your capitalization.

But this looks really good, I can't wait to see what you do in the next chapter.

Also, you can make headings for chapters by putting equals signs on either side of them. Example:

Book One
(two equal signs on either side)

Chapter One
(three equal signs on either side)

Section One
(four equal signs on either side)