User blog comment:Brockfang/On the Knife's Edge/@comment-1630956-20100312021043

.*sniff* WWAAAAHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Tregan DIED! Hey, Ceteruler met a hedgehog!

Right here: She thought about it carefully before answering, "I’ll go first."

Maybe put "I'd" instead of "I'll"

Now WRITEWRITEWRITEWRITEWRITEWRITEWRITEWRITEWRITEWRITEWRITEWRITEWRITEWRITEWRITEWRITEWRITEWRITE! NOW!