User blog comment:Laria Wavedeep/Laria Wavedeep/@comment-1146641-20100520201339

Leave Zega's name, it adds to the villain-y-effect. I like the broadsword idea :)

Do you mind if I critique something?? An old otterwife called Lotus was nursing to Laria and Frewn was tending to a young otter who had tripped over a rock and had his footpaw cut.

--^ Needs to be fixed. How about, An old otter wife called Lotus, nurse to Laria and Frewn, was tending to a young otter who had tripped over a rock and had his footpad cut.? Or something like that.

Aren't a foot and a paw basically the same thing? So, if I were you, I'd change it to footpad, which keeps the general idea.

Anyway, it is veeeerrrryyy good, and please update soon!