User blog comment:Sister Armel/Revenge of a Warrior/@comment-1630956-20100719211209

A few things. Use break, not brake. (use ctrl+F to find the places i'm talking about.) Also, in the first few sentences, you use fight/fought too many times. I sounds repetitive. Instead of the last fight (in the third sentence) try battling or somthing like that. Oh, and it's staves, not stave's.

I like how you wrote the battle, although they should've teamed up, he didn't say that wasn't allowed. KIC!