User blog comment:Princeofmousethiefs18/New Story: Duerthy Mole/@comment-2207385-20120110202646

Ohhhh!! Gotta love how the first chapter is so far, but try to seperate dialoque in your paragraphs, making it easier to read, also I don't know why, but I loved the part of Born under the sun hehehe, Keep it up!!