User blog comment:SalemtheCruel/A little night music/@comment-4197188-20111227141748

All right, starting to like it more and more so far. In the eight chapter, we get our first sight of Francis; were would the story be without yet another swashbuckling, hungry, foolish but nevertheless deadly hare! So they climb to the top of the hill; just a point of clarification, how far from Redwall is this? Than they meet this mysterious rat; I'm liking him already! Now, they get back, and there was a fight. The Abbess comes out, takes one look at the situation, and punishes Shemp? How did she know how to punish him so quickly? Was she watching the whole time?

Now, in chapter ten; gangs! :D Getting a new sense of culture not described by Jacques! Is this the only "gang", or is this a popular thing? Mention of a mysterious prohibition, the cat has a sword no one noticed, and Vilaya makes up a story about her past (didn't really get why she did that). I like it! It turns out that this sword was a slain warlord's; I would have thought Vilaya would berate the cat for not taking command himself! Also, she decides to spill a bunch of secrets to him; again, seems out of character. Oh well; I have weird tastes. Now we go to Indigo Crossing; again, where is this, and where did this rat pop up from? How did he know them? So, we fall down into a tomb, whose owner is named Skeleton; ironic indeed. I think you should have elaborated more on the creepy feel of it, added more description. Still, awesome idea! Also, planters of Malkariss? How cool is that?

Dibbuns against bedtime! Love those little critters; too bad they get busted instantly! The sister gives 'em extra chores; I didn't know Dibbuns actually had any! Interested in the "revenge" of the little girl. Back to the old man; it's Vilaya's dad! What a beast! Living in an underground plantation, raising a future terror; I wish we would get to see him! Then, assassination; I'm ready for it, whoops, turns out I'm not. And that's the last we hear of good old Skeleton. So, back to Vilaya. Sal makes a proposal, not caring about Jessie, but his heart doesn't seem to be in it, as he gives up as soon as she says no. Perhaps dragging that part out a little? Then Jessie comes, gets mad ofc, takes the ring, and walks away. All in all, great work so far! Like how Vilaya is both evil and is becoming slowly attracted to the cat. I'll comment/read more later today!