User blog comment:Skalarana/A story of a sister and a brother/@comment-2047407-20100522005344

Im back

Ch 3: "He did not like young ones at all, partly because they all was screamed at the site of him"

does the was need to be there?

Ch 3: " great hall was its name"

Capitalize the G and the H

Final one (for now), Ch 3: "Good the dibbins got you up, the dibbins did nothing but trip me."

change the dibbins to dibbuns

Sorry for all the critique, I hope that doesnt make me a bad person