User blog comment:Lord Rose Thorn/The Badger and the Rose: Book One A Champion in the Midst Chapter One - Eight/@comment-2207385-20110517235558

RRRRROOOOSSSSEEE thhhoooooorrrrrn!!!. yep that is one cool name hehe, the story seems interesting up to now, but heres a bit of advice, when writng paragraphs and dialogue try to seperate them it makes it easier to read and makes the flow of the story run smoother. Nice start!!

May your blade always strike true and Happystorytelling!!!