User blog comment:Brockkers/The Quest of Martin's Sword/@comment-1763658-20100130033519

The scene had a great twist, you caught the mood well.

As for my last comment, I meant will you have other plots besides him finding Martin's sword?

If you want to make a scene with action in it, shorten the sentences, and create new lines for each action. That way the reader will absorb the info before jumping to the next line. Try it out