User blog comment:Evil Fox Warlord/Bane Slytung, the scourge of Southsward/@comment-1988904-20100526235818

Digging under Redwall....interesting

Mongoose..mongooses...mongeese? Neat! Are they in Bane's horde?

Like Rorc said you'll have to explain where Bane was during the events of the Bellmaker

Great so far, though you might want to work on the formatting because it's hard to read in one big paragraph. Make sure you hit the enter key twice between paragraphs.

The prologue was in past tense and now the first chapter was in present tense. You might want to keep on eye on that.

And it was bit confusing the mongoose one and two. You could saw the one and the other or the first and the second, might sound better.