User blog comment:Ronnie Macleaf/Ronnie Macleafs quest/@comment-1488988-20101113151551

This seems pretty interesting! It could turn out to be a great story. Why was Ronnie's family ambushed? And how is he going to get vengeance on the rats?

The problem is that a lot of your grammar and some of your spelling is slightly off (which is understandable, if English is your second language). You should probably find a beta for the story, to help you out with that sort of thing. (A beta is someone who reads a chapter before it's published and edits it for grammar, spelling, OOC-ness, and whatnot).

I could beta if you like :)

(P.S. This is dawnstar19, in case you didn't figure that out ...)