User blog comment:Marion the Warrioress/Warrioress/@comment-7662967-20160824202534

Hey, welcome to Redwall Wiki! I'm Sayna (not Martin's mother, his twin sister that I made up ..) lol. Anyways, I think a lot of people were sad about Martin's situation ... I was at least, and I wrote my own fanfic on how Rose didn't really die and all that. Actually I just rewrote the book, and then Mossflower, and Legend of Luke, and it kind of went on from there :P

So I'm all for reading a alternative Martin story :) So far, I like it a lot, I mean .. there's not much here yet, but it's a promising start. My only advise right now is to separate your paragraphs a bit .. say, set Marion's thoughts apart from the rest of the story by making them their own paragraph. It just makes it easier to read, I make a new paragraph every time somebeast talks, and for thoughts/flashbacks. But that's just a cosmetic thing, I like the story so far :D I'll be reading :3