User blog comment:Wolf985/the tale of two rogues: chapter 1/@comment-2207385-20110504033438

wow that was one fast paced intro and heres some advice, when writing a story try to seperating dialogue and action in different parts makes it easier to read, also adding descriptive scenery goes a long way into making a story seem more alive, and up to now the story seems interesting thanks to that little baby otter ohoh I love otters, and finally hunt down those little typos.

May your blade always strike true and Happy storytelling!!