User blog comment:Snowstripe the Fierce/The Spearmaid/@comment-2142396-20150720091830

A story about Spearlady Gorse? Yes! I mean, she was the first ever Badger Lady, what not to love? :D I love how you portrayed her and Patchpaw, and I enjoyed all the detailed descriptions of the life in Salamandastron. The scoffing contest between Patchpaw and Ceteruler was especially funny! :D

Spathar makes an interesting villain, especially with his hatred toward Mortspear. Same goes for Werefo, as he hates Spathar but portrayed as another antagonist instead of goodbeast. I can't believe Redeye and Gevvy were stupid enough to try and catch a bird with a rope! :D And that blackbird seemed to be awfully strong for its species... Just saying.

The ending made me really worried for Clea! Not only she was shot, but shot with a poisoned arrow... That's more than just bad!

If there is any advice I can give, it's adding more details to the battle scenes. The shooting between the vermin and Salamandastrong in chapter 8 was well done, but I think the battle with the Shadow of the Deep could've been more descriptive. This and double-spacing the paragraphs as Sayna and Reep said. ;)

Keep the story up, I'm enjoying it! :)