User blog comment:Penglens/A tale of Feorag/@comment-1298206-20091102220059

OK, this is review.

You dedicated it to me? That's really nice of you! I'll have to give you a good review for that ;D

Instead of saying," he was clad in woodsman clothing, a simple tunic of red underneath a brown homespun cloak", you could say,"He was clad in a simple red tunic with a homespun brown cloak that he wore over it, the garments of a simple woodlander."

You could rewrite the sentence where it talks about all of Feorag's jobs where it says,"The number of jobs was endless", instead of saying "the list went on and on."

I like the details that you give. For instance, when you described what the injured squirrel's injured side of his face looked like. Details are very important.

You could improve some on the highland squirrel's accent. You could replace "I" with "Ah".

I like the description of the setting. It sounds very enchanting.

I also like how you talked about what the healer used besides bandages and a wet rag to wash off the wound.