User blog comment:Dorothea Duckfontein Dillworthy/Karina/@comment-1630956-20100715000025

Thanks to Snow's comment, I have read this again. One thing that struck me as akward was this paragraph:

''A young ottermaid by the name of Karina sat up in bed at Redwall and stretched. Suddenly, Karina remembered what an exciting day it was going to be. Mother Bluestripe, the badger Mum of Redwall, had promised to tell her about her great ancestor, Karina of the River. Karina was proud that she had been named after her great-great-great-great-great-great-grandmother, Karina hoped that someday she might be like her ancestor.''

There are just simply too many Karinas. Change a few to "she"s or "her"s and it'll sound much better.