User blog comment:Bluestripe the Wild/The Lord of Bloodwrath/@comment-1145722-20100617055430

I like!! More!! I can tell that you've improved in your writing skills! :) KIU matey!!

And as a little tip, in the part about the water snake, instead of 'a figure in the water with its eyes above the water...' put, 'a figure watched him from where it lurked in the river, its eyes slowly rising above the surface...'

Just a tip. :)