User blog comment:Laria Wavedeep/Laria Wavedeep/@comment-1630956-20100522154221

Great updates, sorry it took me so long to read them. Here's some sentences that, with slight changes, could read better.

He could virtually wield any weapon, though his favourite was a massive scimitar. try "wield virtually"

When he was battling, he wore usually only a silver breastplate, his chainmail underneath it. how 'bout "usually wore"

I think Zegarath made a mistake when he left Grall alive...