User blog comment:JamesOfVallron/Journey of heros-Chapter 1/@comment-1427879-20101030093537

Sounds interesting. As I said on yore page, don't indent, it does automatically and makes it easier to read. It would also be easier if you kept all the chapters on one blog. I think you can get LordTBT to rename it for you then just edit it and keep adding chapters. You also had a few typos and punctuation errors (need commas, wrong capitals etc.) ie. tinny should be tiny.

And apprentice and teacher just traveling around? Interesting...KIU