User blog comment:AlexanderWiki2002/Siege over Mossflower Country/@comment-26073479-20150402002131

Cool story! I like how you incorporated Monitors and Flitchaye in as villians XD

I don't mean to be rude or anything, and I'm probably not one to say anything like this as I haven't started my own fic, but your format needs some work :) I've found that starting new paragraphs when a different character starts to talk and when the scene changes helps :)

Other than that, this is great! :D Can't wait to see what happens next! KIU!