User blog comment:Danthemanb/Elmtails tail/@comment-1023719-20090407150255

Aye! :P

this is great so far, sorry it took so long before I could check out your story. Anyways, update soon!

Oh, and here's a tip you might want to try. When a different person starts taliking, press enter, so the two speekers' lines are separated. It makes it easier to read, and you know who's talking. Make any sense?

Incase it didn't here's an example. (from your story)

“Nobody calls me a coward! Take this, and this!” “Hey, Coward your self! Ouch! Grrr, how do you like this!” “Ouch!”

See how they're all bunched together. It makes it hard to read who's saying what. so if you do this:

“Nobody calls me a coward! Take this, and this!”(enter)

“Hey, Coward your self! Ouch! Grrr, how do you like this!”(enter)

“Ouch!”

See, it makes it easier to read.

Well I hope this helped. Again the story's great!

~Mariel