User blog comment:Piece-of-Eight/Pieces of Eight/@comment-2207385-20110725054006

OH OH!! sounds awesome! the intonation and form of point of view is fantastic!, the descriptions are simple but hit the spot so sweetly!, heres a bit of advice, I don't think you introduced the protagonists good, maybe I missed it but I'm not sure if you described their species and what they were wearing, you should take a bit of time to describe them so the reader can get a clear picture of them, So far so good! KIU!!(keep it up!)