User talk:WildloughRhulain

--Ember Nickel 00:27, 21 June 2006 (UTC)

Editors
You have been added to the Editors page. --LordTBT 05:14, 22 June 2006 (UTC)

My main talkpage has been archived. It's still active.
My main talkpage has been archived. The page is still active; I only moved it because it was taking up a lot of space here and it was getting hard for me to keep track of the posts on this one page.--WildloughRhulain  Taste stones! 11:31, 27 May 2009 (UTC)

Help in story
Well, I read what you have, and I looked at your character pages, so you could have Rygar go south, and destroy her holt, taking Skipjack as a slave. Jadrin would pursue her, meeting many friends, and enemies, on the way. Your most trustworthy warrior, ~Blizzard6654. P.S. Next time, could you just leave a message on my talk page? It's much easier that way.

PoL
I didn't revert your edit at all. I'd advise you to check the page history. -- LordTBT  Talk! 22:32, 31 May 2009 (UTC)

Now then, what do you want to happen next? I'm not entirely sure of thta. Contact me if you've made a breakthrough. Umrag the Destroyer 23:36, 4 June 2009 (UTC)Umrag the Destroyer

I'm trying to figure out the next piece for Streamrunner now. :) --WildloughRhulain  Taste stones! 23:55, 4 June 2009 (UTC)

Grammar
You got everything right, except this: Tell you what,{that's supposed to be this symbol ;} I'll let you live and keep you as my personal slave. Umrag the Destroyer 00:15, 5 June 2009 (UTC)Umrag the Destroyer

Jumping between scenes
I think it's fine. What's your next idea on this story? Umrag the Destroyer 00:24, 5 June 2009 (UTC)Umrag the Destroyer

Sounds cool to me
Yes, that sounds fine. Maybe Rygar needs to have a meeting with all her captains, so she tells him to contact the captains and bring them to her tent. As he walks around he meets numerous different vermin, and gets to know the camp.{I think My Lady sounds better then mistress, but it's your choice} Umrag the Destroyer 00:55, 5 June 2009 (UTC)Umrag the Destroyer

Story
Scene figured, though this will be pretty long. Skipjack was lying on the ground, having a rest after the march. The march was not long, but he had to carry some of Rygar's things, not to mention drag his chains along. He was enjoying a bit of quietness and peacefulness when an ermine kicked him, and said, "Get up. Rygar wants to see you." The otter gulped nervously. Why had she summoned him? When they got to her tent the stoat stepped forward and called out, "Commander, I have brought him." She answered back in a smooth, silky voice. "Bring him in the tent, then leave us." Skipjack entered the tent, shaking. What horrors would he find inside? The tent was sparsely furnished, for Rygar had no time for such foolish things. She was sitting on a plain wooden chair, and they're were similar chairs next to her. Yet there was a feel of darkness in this tent, a feel of death. He bowed low, and asked, "What are my orders, My Lady?" She smiled dangerously and said, "I will be having a meeting with my captains. Be sure to get them here by one hour. Or else..." The otter swallowed again, and answered, "Yes, My Lady." Then he exited the tent, still bowing. Once he got out he started walking in a random direction. It was not long before he came across a small group of foxes, all who were eating woodpidgeon. He timidly walked up, and asked,"Um, sirs, could you point me to where the Captains are, sirs?" One fox, larger then the rest, wiped his mouth on his hand and stood up, walking to Skipjack. "Oh look, it's Rygar's little pet, wandering all alone here. Why don't we show him the correct way, eh mates?" The group sniggered. The otter nervously backed away from him, then cried out in pain and fell on his knees as the fox punched him in the stomach. Then the fox grabbed Skipjack by the neck and brought him closer to his own face, and then he threw him on the ground. Suddenly a voice sounded out of the gloom. "Don't you have better things to do then to assasult Rygar's slave?" The fox ran as he heard that voice, and he was closely followed by his comrades. A tall wolf stepped out, looking at Skipjack. "What are you doing here, slave? You should be back at your spot!" The otter stood up and said, "Sir, I need to find all the captains and bring them to Rygar." The wolf grinned, and said, "Well, you have one captain right here, and I know were the rest are. Probably." The otter asked, "Could you take me to them, sir?" "Of course. But you better not speak unless you're forced to. Some captains take offence very easily." As they walked the otter asked various questions, and he would answer them. "Where exactly are we going, sir?" "We'll be going to Captain Smena's tent. She's the only female captain in this horde. She can charm almost any vermin with her looks, and she excellent at weilding a blade." They soon reached a tent which was packed with creatures and full of noise. They entered the tent and the wolf tried to overshout the din when a slender, female fox called out, "Quiet! Captain Saberfang wants to speak!" "Well, Rygar's new slave wants to tell you-"Quiet!" A large wolf, twice as big as Saberfang, put a cutlass at his throat. "If he wants to speak then let him speak!" The otter gulped and said, "Captains, Rygar wants to speak with you at her tent." An old, wizened stoat walked up to him and wheezed, "What if we don't want to go, eh? What then?" The captians began pressing in on him, all shouting objections. All except for Captain Saberfang. He stood secluded, growing paler by the minute. Suddenly all the captians fell back, scared of something. Skipjack turned, and fell from a glancing blow. He swallowed as he saw Rygar above him, scowling angrily. "Why did this take so long? Why did you not just blow the whistle?!" The otter cried out as her footpaw smashed on to his chest, constricting his breathing. "My Lady, uhhh, I got no whistle from anybody!" She gnashed her teeth and called out, "Rargar, get over here!" The ermine that brought Skipjack to the tent went in, and said, "Yes Commander?" Her voice sounded like thunder. "Why did you not give him the whistle?!" "I-Arghhh!" She slew him with one single blow, and took a bonehandled whistle from his corpse. "Here, just blow it and any hordebeast will follow you." She turned, and exited the tent, followed by the captains. A fox took Skipjack back to his post. -- I hope you like it, I put a lot of effort into it. Umrag the Destroyer 02:20, 5 June 2009 (UTC)Umrag the Destroyer

Whoops
How about...Dargar! Umrag the Destroyer 02:41, 5 June 2009 (UTC)Umrag the Destroyer

Yes
I meant Skipjack. You're switching to Jadrin next, right? Umrag the Destroyer 03:26, 5 June 2009 (UTC)Umrag the Destroyer

Skipping scene
How about this? As I grew older I began to realise it was not likely that I could avenge my rescuer's murder, so I asked my dad to teach me how to sling well. We took lessons in slinging, and soon I became a master. Then, a season after I was rescued, we had two more kits, Ayeren and Cadron. They were both little scamps, running around all over the place. Soon, Skipjack taught them how to swim, and I instructed them in the art of slinging. Father made them little slings, perfect for those rascals. We once met a large otter, who said he was Skipper of Redwall Abbey. We wanted to go there, and we were about to leave, when disaster struck. -- You think that's enough for four seasons? I'm not entirely sure. Umrag the Destroyer 15:40, 5 June 2009 (UTC)Umrag the Destroyer

?
What type of tracks? And, is it the same friend that made her the portrait? And also, what would she need back at the holt? Umrag the Destroyer 15:55, 5 June 2009 (UTC)Umrag the Destroyer

O-kay
Sure! So who's the friend? Umrag the Destroyer 16:02, 5 June 2009 (UTC)Umrag the Destroyer

Sorry, but whenever I get a chance to read it something changes. --Martin II Confucius say FIGHT!  16:20, 5 June 2009 (UTC)

check out Wolfrise, its my fan fic
title says all --Colonel Acelin 16:20, 5 June 2009 (UTC)colonel acelin

alright
Sure! Should I start doing the scene now? Umrag the Destroyer 16:21, 5 June 2009 (UTC)Umrag the Destroyer

Scene
This good? We were about to leave when Ayeren suddendly fell over, and started wheezing and coughing. "Are you alright, Ayeren?" She was curled up in a ball, and was wheezing worse and worse. "Throat um be hurting, and head too. It hurts!" Jadrin worriedly knelt, and touched Ayeren's forhead. She gasped. It was ice-cold! "Cadron, can you carry our stuff? I'll need to carry her." The little one grabbed the stuff and said, "Where we be going, Jadrin?" "Remeber Haunicca?{I know, random name} We're going to visit her, and she'll make Ayeren alright." Haunicca was a nice and cheerful haremaiden, about Jadrin's age. She lived in a small, cozy hut, all alone in the woods. Her father, before he died, had taught her how to box. She was an expert. Once they got their a slim haremaid with a clearly homemade kilt stepped out, smiling. "What ho, Jadrin, what brings ya to me cozy little home?" "Ayeren is sick. Can you help her?" Haunicca looked at Ayeren, and said, "Sure thing, but this'll take a while, doncha know. Why don't you make us some food while I'm working?" Jadrin nodded and turned to Cadron. "Cadron! Where are the food packs?!" The little otter giggled and said, "Ooops, I forgot em. Bring em back Jadrin, will ya?" The haremaiden roared with laughter as Jadrin's hand slapped to her brow. "Fine,I'll go get them. Haunicca, make sure this little rougue doesn't run away!" As she was running home she noticed something strange. There were tracks, but not just any tracks.Her father had taught her all sorts of tracks, and this one was a wild cat. The tracks led straight home. As she nervously entered the holt, some sixth sense made her turn around. She only had time for a quick scream before something tackled her and everything went black. -- SUSPENCE!!!!!! _____________________{insert maniacal laughter there} Hope you like the scene, and you're welcome! Umrag the Destroyer 16:54, 5 June 2009 (UTC)Umrag the Destroyer

Go ahead and post the stuff on the beta page. Will try to be quicker this time 8|--Martin II Confucius say FIGHT!  16:55, 5 June 2009 (UTC)

You mean the scene I wrote? Wasn't that already in there?--Martin II Confucius say FIGHT!  18:53, 5 June 2009 (UTC)

Explanation
What I mean is after evrything that we have now, when Jadrin and co. are about to leave to find Skipjack, Ayeren get's sick. They take her to her friend, then Jadrin goes back to the holt, where she gets attacked by whomever. Umrag the Destroyer 19:06, 5 June 2009 (UTC)Umrag the Destroyer

Sure
That's fine with me! Umrag the Destroyer 20:48, 5 June 2009 (UTC)Umrag the Destroyer

All good
Everything is good now, 'cpet you forgot to capitilise some sentences. Once they enter the hut, maybe Haunicca tackles the wildcat and stuns him for a short time{she's good at boxing, remember} Umrag the Destroyer 21:53, 5 June 2009 (UTC)Umrag the Destroyer

Story
Sounds good, and the accent SEEMS correct to me. {I'm not too good at it either} I think Pinedance Coneslinger knows a lot about this accent. So, we going back to Skipjack, or are we staying at Jadrin? Umrag the Destroyer 00:15, 6 June 2009 (UTC)Umrag the Destroyer

Idea
I have an idea for Skipjack: Rygar tells him to bring her food, so when he's really close to her he slips, and food spills on Rygar. He gets punished severly, and when he falls asleep he's ready to give up hope. But then Martin the Warrior comes to him in a vision, and tells him not to give up, that Jadrin is coming, etc. etc. etc. Umrag the Destroyer 00:29, 6 June 2009 (UTC)Umrag the Destroyer

Finished User blog:Ladyamber88/Amber Streamgale --Amber Streamgale  Don't mess with me!! 00:39, 6 June 2009 (UTC)

O-kay
Sure! Umrag the Destroyer 01:08, 6 June 2009 (UTC)Umrag the Destroyer

Hmmm...
I think ten isn't enough, maybe twenty. I was also thinking about Rygar slowly, extremly painfully, scratching Skipjack chest, from his left shulder to his right hip, or something like that. Umrag the Destroyer 01:41, 6 June 2009 (UTC)Umrag the Destroyer

*snort* Sure
Why don't we do both, if you want the readers to REALLY hate Rygar, as you put it. Umrag the Destroyer 01:50, 6 June 2009 (UTC)Umrag the Destroyer

?
I don't get your point. Why shouldn't they be able to hate her even more? Umrag the Destroyer 01:58, 6 June 2009 (UTC)Umrag the Destroyer

Scene
Here we are, then: "Get up, slave. Rygar wants you to bring her food." Skipjack stood up, groaning. He was exhausted, both because of his labor and because of constantly fearing Rygar. As he took the food and walked to her tent, he was lagging more and more, until every step was an effort. When he reached her tent at last, his eyes were almost closed. Then, right next to Rygar, he fell asleep. He slipped on a patch of wet grass, and the food flew right into Rygar's lap! Skipjack's eyes went wide open as the bronze{or whatever} plate clattered to the floor. He cried out in terror as Rygar picked him up by the neck, her face exploding in rage. "I need four guards at the double, now! You two, clean up this mess, and you two, chain that otter someplace up and give him twenty lashes!" The guards obeyed instantly and without question, knowing what Rygar could do when she was angry. They chained up the otter between two trees, leaving him quite helpless. "Now, take his tunic off{or whatever coveres his chest and chest only!} so the blows will hurt him more. Skipjack prevented himself from crying out in pain as the first lash hit his back. He managed to not cry out till the sixth. After that, what was a horror became a nightmare. His back was covered in rivulets of blood, and he found it painful to move. Rygar dismissed the two guards and stood in front of Skipjack, sharpening her claws on a rock. "Now then, Skipjack, you know the only reason I let you live is because I thought you would make a good, capable slave. That can change if you keep making these mistakes. This time, I won't kill you, but I will teach you a lesson." The otter shuddered. Then he screamed as the wolverine dug her claws in his left shoulder, and then dragged them down, so slowly. The otter was covered in sweat, panting, and half-dead by the time Rygar finished. She broke the chains and placed a footpaw on Skipjack's body, which had fallen to the ground. "This is your last warning." Then she walked away, and let the guards carry Skipjack back to his posts. Almost immediately he fell asleep, not even bothering to eat. In his dreams there was darkness and terror everywhere, vermin sacking villages, and evil covered this world. Tears poured unchecked down the otter's face, as he knelt and cried out, "Must I succumb to evil?! Is there nothing I can do?!" "No." Skipjack looked up. He saw a ray of light shining through the darkness, and out of it was striding a strong, handsome mouse with a beatiful sword. "Do not lose hope, Skipjack, for Jadrin is coming. Jadrin is coming, and nothing will stop her!" Skipjack awoke with a jolt, thinking only about three words. Jadrin is coming! -- Hope you like it! Umrag the Destroyer 02:56, 6 June 2009 (UTC)Umrag the Destroyer

New fan fic
Hi Lady Wildlough, I have a new fan fic posted! I am Lord Brocktree of Salamandastron  Want some combat?

I meant on both stories, I can't wait to read more, its really interesting!!--<font color="Teal">Aida Otterock  <font color="Teal" size="2">Talk! 20:12, 7 June 2009 (UTC)

Story
I think your right, 'bout Lady Rygar, and changing Martin's words, and all that stuff. Well, about the scene, here you go. -- Haunicca desperately put a warm rag on Ayeren's brow, and gave her more medicine. But nothing seemed to help. Suddenly, Cadron yelled, "Look, it's a wildcat!" The haremaiden ran to the window, and sure enough, there was a wildcat running to her home. "Cadron, sling at it!" The babe shot a rock, and the wildcat narrowly ducked it. Haunicca ran up, and blacked his eye out. Then Jadrin arived on the scene, and shouted, "He's a friend, he's a friend!" The haremaiden paused in mid-punch, and stared inridicoulsly{how do you spell that} at Jadrin. "WHAT?! Vermin are never friends Jadrin, you should know that!" At this point Cadron ran out and cried, "Don't hurt em, varmint!" The wildcat groaned and rubbed his eye, saying, "Ah'll have ya know that mah name is Garnrion Swiftaxe, and ah'm no varmint! Ah'm here to help the sick un'!" -- I'll need to think about how to continue this, but here you are! Umrag the Destroyer 23:07, 7 June 2009 (UTC)Umrag the Destroyer

update
on WOD--<font color="olive" style="background:saffron">Martin II <font color="olive" style="background:saffron">Confucius say FIGHT!  23:11, 7 June 2009 (UTC)

Scene
Haunicca and Cardon watched Garidiron with eagle eyes as he approached Ayeren's bed. "Let me see ya, lassie." He looked over her carefully, and then he said, "Lassie, do you have an allergy to ants? " The otterkit nodded. "Well, then ah know what to do." He fed her some medicine and she fell asleep. Soon they were back up, and Jadrin and her friends prepared to leave. Then Haunicca bounded up, holding a haversack of her own. "What ho, chaps, I'm coming with ya!" Jadrin stood up and said, "No way, Haunicca. I don't want you to get hurt." Gardiron grinned. "Why aren't ya objecting to me, lassie? Ah'm going too." Jadrin whirled around on him. "You have a good reason to go, but Haunicca-"I have a good reason also." They turned to her, shocked. "Rygar killed my pa, and I'm not gonna sit around here while you guys go off to adventures!" There was a moment of awkward silence, then Cadron said, "Well, I don't know about you twee, but I'm rescuing Skipjack." The group chuckled and started walking, following their destiny. --- I can do the part with Skipjack as soon as you tell me a bit more. Healing is just not enough. Umrag the Destroyer 01:47, 8 June 2009 (UTC)Umrag the Destroyer

Scene
Here you are: Skipjack woke, aching all over. A stoat walked up and said in a harsh tone, "Get up, slave. We have some marching to do." The poor otter tried to stand, but he could not. The stoat whipped him, again and again, but the otter still didn't get up. Then the stoat stopped whipping him and moved over, bowing. Skipjack looked up, and saw Rygar standing over him. "So, slave, do you want me to kill you now, or do you want to live?" Skipjack tried to stand again, but he couldn't. "My Lady, uhhh, I can't, uhhh, stand up!" She smiled cruelly. "Then I shall make you." "My Lady?" She turned, to see Captain Saberfang bowing before her. "Maybe we should heal him, My Lady?" She grabbed him by the neck, and bared her teeth. "What?!" The wolf blanched with fear, and spoke. "My Lady, what use to you is a slave who can't stand properly?" She let him go, leaving the wolf massaging his throat. "So be it. Get a healer, Saberfang!" Skipjack watched from almost closed eyes as Saberfang walked away. The otter wondered, who's side was the wolf really on?

Umrag the Destroyer 03:31, 8 June 2009 (UTC)Umrag the Destroyer --

Scene
There you go:

Suddenly, Ayeren felt something bite her and she yelped with pain. Jadrin looked at her. "You okay, Ayeren? Need a rest?" The otterkit shook her head. "Skipjack is more important. Let's go!"

{extra line}Everyone bowed their heads, sorry. They never thought that Ganrion was such a good beast.

{after Skipjack gets knocked out} His mother screamed and ran to the far side of the Holt. She managed to outrun her foes, but they were coming, and quickly. "Ayeren, Cadron, go hide in the water and use reeds to breath! Hurry!" They obeyed, both scared witless. Just after they ran a contemptous voice sounded behind the ottermum. "If you tell me where those little otters went, I'll let you live, scum." She turned, and saw a wolverine with a nocked bow. Her face was completely devoid of fear as she answered, "I do not fear my own death, but you will pay if you harm one single hair on Skipjack's head." The wolverine smiled. "Then die!" The poor ottermum was blasted back from the force of the shot.

Hope that helped! Umrag the Destroyer 02:29, 10 June 2009 (UTC)Umrag the Destroyer

Jadrin gasped as she heard that Skipjack was captured. "But where is Mom, then?" They sniffed, and then took Jadrin to the back door. There, she saw her mother's corpse, with a giant arrow sticking through her. Jadrin cried out in horror, and began to pry out the arrow. After that she took the body and put it next to her father, then arranged them in a sleeping position. -- Shouldn't you have put I knelt and squeezed his STIFFENED paw, not stiffening, since he's long dead. Hope this helps! Umrag the Destroyer 13:35, 10 June 2009 (UTC)Umrag the Destroyer

Could
you have a look at the Mossflower General Company Patrol, please? The info is on Mauran's blog. Thanks :) Pinedance the Slinger of Pinecones <font color="silver" size="2">Coneslinger Wood 01:01, 14 June 2009 (UTC)

update AoS<font color="Green ">Lady of the Shield-arm  <font color="Saffron" size="2">By My Sword I Am 01:00, 15 June 2009 (UTC)

Update.-- Pinedance the Slinger of Pinecones <font color="silver" size="2">Coneslinger Wood 23:26, 16 June 2009 (UTC)

Update.-- Pinedance the Slinger of Pinecones <font color="silver" size="2">Coneslinger Wood 22:44, 17 June 2009 (UTC)

Update!
Update on The Storm. Wow, that took FOREVER. Sorry, been rather busy *cough* lazy *cough* lately, so it's not much to show for a week.--<font color="olive" style="background:saffron">Martin II <font color="olive" style="background:saffron">Confucius say FIGHT!  03:08, 19 June 2009 (UTC)

Finished with the beta corrections!--<font color="olive" style="background:saffron">Martin II <font color="olive" style="background:saffron">Confucius say FIGHT!  03:14, 19 June 2009 (UTC)

Dual
You wana fight the real redwall way? you want to become the stongest of them all? Then go here!--<font color="blue" style="background:green">I'm Elmtail, please read Elmtails tail! <font color="goldenrod" style="background:green"> Communicate with me  18:51, 19 June 2009 (UTC)

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