User blog comment:Segalia/Segalia Riverstorm's voyage/@comment-2207385-20110313215137

First of all let me say that this is a fantastic story!! and let me say the things that were excellent, first the tone and characters was astounding you could really feel the love put into their creations, I also noticed quite a lot of female characters this isn't bad at all since it adds a unique taste to the tone of the story, and second you may have not emphasized or used the characters feeling to describe them but instead used their actions and speech giving them a different form to express themselves nicely done!! as for the negative things I didn't really found anything bad except that the story sometimes abruptly changed or moved a bit to fast, meaning I sometimes had to reread some sentences in order to understand what happend, and that's it. On the side notes I was really surprised on the villian that he actually had a family! and the abundance of unique characters really show your dedicaton to the story. Great job and keep it up!! Happy storytelling!!!