User blog comment:Iridian Starblade/Legend of Marfang/@comment-1738724-20101006073341

Woah...a very big block of writing. Just a tip, remember to make a new paragraph every time a new character speaks. That way, its easier to read. Because if there's just these blocks, it looks very intimidating...

I've read a bit, and like Windflin said, its pretty good. KIC! (KIC means Keep It Coming and KIU means Keep It Up).