User blog comment:Laria Wavedeep/Salamandastron's Fate/@comment-1630956-20100112202457

Eight paragraphs before chapter 3: The hares on the shore, Salixa and Rowanbloom shouted the warcry.

What would sound better: The hares on the shore, along with Salixa and Rowanbloom shouted the warcry.

Other than that, wonderful! Haha Alutar's in love with Rowanbloom. Thrila's kind of full of himself and there's mutinous talk in his horde/army/whatever you want to call it. All in all the makings of a great story!