User blog comment:Hollyfire53/The Ultimate War/@comment-1630956-20100728184252

That was another thing- Neil had suddenly become a killed. killed should be killer

Great update, a lot of family/revenge bonds in that chapter. You're coming up with a really complex plot for this. This is definatly in my top ten already, and there's still a lot to go.

@Shadowpool: If you don't like it, instead of just stating that you don't like it, say why you don't like it. If you state your reasons, it sounds much less dogmatic. Right now, you sound like you have just made up your mind not to like it because you want to say somthing different from the rest of the commentators. Even if you don't like it, you must give Holly credit for attempting this, it's a big project.

KIC, Holly!