User blog comment:Thorn Rag/Prouloge/@comment-988934-20090205205644

Darn this blog, other people besides the user can't edit it anymore. Anyways, some edit help, don't try to indent, you create those wierd boxes, just leave it alone and it indents itself. I reccomend that you first create the story on the original fan fiction page, then transfer it to the blogs, that way, people can help yo with the story.

But overall, its a story that has potential, and has piqued my interest.