User talk:SalemtheCruel

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Hi
Hiya! I like your fanfic! --  Cheetahstar123   Call me Cheetah!    01:14, February 18, 2011 (UTC)

You're here! Okay I thought I made it clear but obviously I didn't. I have made a firm final decision. Layna is out/not in. Rori and Slashclaw are in! They may even get in the next update but I shall have to see abou that. See you round!-Segalia Riverstorm, Archer Ottermaid Warrioress    Eph. 6:10 17:40, February 18, 2011 (UTC)

Answer.
I'll read that fanfic as well and see wot I can do. :) Nitram the Warrior Let's be friends! :) 01:21, February 19, 2011 (UTC)

In a little, I'm finishing french homework. Nitram the Warrior Let's be friends! :) 01:26, February 19, 2011 (UTC)

Review.
Yore fanfic is cool, matey. But it needs a some cleaning. Nitram the Warrior Let's be friends! :) 18:21, February 19, 2011 (UTC)

You know, you're probably the only one who's really asked me that. I have a few small ideas for the next update but when I start writing it may flow out. If I get up to it-which I may since you asked-I'll probably write it out and either post it tonight or tomorrow. Thanks I guess-Segalia Riverstorm, Archer Ottermaid Warrioress    Eph. 6:10 18:27, February 20, 2011 (UTC)

Update
On SRV. I may continue this section or not. Start of Chapter 9. Please comment! I don't if I should introduce Slashclaw and Rori or just hint at them...comment your opinions!-Segalia Riverstorm, Archer Ottermaid Warrioress    Eph. 6:10 19:15, February 20, 2011 (UTC)

:)
There are a lot of good fanfics written how you write yore, and yores is no exception. I hope I can continue reading it in the future. Nitram the Warrior Let's be friends! :) 21:48, February 20, 2011 (UTC)

well hello, Salem, nice to meet you. I'm so glad to meet another member of the Cruel family :D if you want you can check out my other accounts on some websites if you like my art work. Course it's all a choice, mate, not forcing you to do so ;) Selound  REVENGE FOR THE FOXES 00:39, February 23, 2011 (UTC)

cool, mate, I myself have a story on here, but I need to do a lot of editing though ^^; my more recent ones are on Devaintart ;)One of these days I may add more chapters to the one I posted here after I edit it, but I'm not exactly sure if I have the time, but hey, I'll manage somehow Selound  REVENGE FOR THE FOXES 00:46, February 23, 2011 (UTC)

Fan Fiction
Ideas, huh? Hmmmm.... How about Vinati and Matt travel across Mossflower until they come to Redwall. Then, they take shelter there until the ferret Warlord lays siege to the Abbey. Well, that's all i've got at the moment. Hope it helps! --  Cheetahstar123   Call me Cheetah!    00:51, February 23, 2011 (UTC)

wow, and that went through an editor and everything. Like how Killconey was mentioned as a girl in a few chapters in some versions of Redwall. I called him, "Killconey the gender changing ferret." With me, I don't have an editor so I have to proofread myself. I find it easy to find my errors by reading it to someone like my little brother :) Selound  REVENGE FOR THE FOXES 00:57, February 23, 2011 (UTC)

ha-ha Sister Mary had a little abbey, little abbey, little abbey... oh and the chapter when the Redwaller's were in the Abbess's tomb, Constance magicall appeared out of no where. Oh my internet sister is a huge Slagar fan as well http://xxxsamanthaxxx.deviantart.com/ but she's mainly active on this account http://jublenarris.deviantart.com/  <font color="Grey">Selound <font color="Grey" size="2"> REVENGE FOR THE FOXES  01:09, February 23, 2011 (UTC)

or Badranga the Barbie girl ;) <font color="Grey">Selound <font color="Grey" size="2"> REVENGE FOR THE FOXES 01:20, February 23, 2011 (UTC)

yeah, I was weird too. Both my friend and I played Redwall games during recess (can't remeber how to spell it) when we we're young ^^; I was always a vixen named Darkshadows <font color="Grey">Selound <font color="Grey" size="2"> REVENGE FOR THE FOXES 01:38, February 23, 2011 (UTC)

I don't know, though I'm kinda bummed about it though :(

It was his right side that they used (trust me, I have the screen shot pics and DvDs) and Slagar's mask was the wrong color (it's supposed to be red and purple, not pink and indigo) <font color="Grey">Selound <font color="Grey" size="2"> REVENGE FOR THE FOXES 01:51, February 23, 2011 (UTC)

hmm sure, why not? <font color="Grey">Selound <font color="Grey" size="2"> REVENGE FOR THE FOXES 02:02, February 23, 2011 (UTC)

Review Request
I'm honored that you'd ask me and I'll do it within this week but I must ask, why did you ask me? Or did you just ask a bunch of random users? Hope I do a good job anyways.

Brockfang  <font color="blue" size="2">Eeeee aye eeeeee  04:17, February 23, 2011 (UTC)

I just did, matey :) Nitram the Warrior <font color="purple" size="2">Let's be friends! :) 15:13, February 25, 2011 (UTC)

By the By, I updated my other fanfic. Would ye like to read it? Nitram the Warrior <font color="purple" size="2">Let's be friends! :) 16:05, February 25, 2011 (UTC).No I don't think the tittle is weird:)

Kigam Tescer: Embodiment Is the name. :) Nitram the Warrior <font color="purple" size="2">Let's be friends! :) 17:04, February 25, 2011 (UTC)

PS:I cant tell, mate, I have not read the Sable Quean.

That's Creepy and amazing at the same time O_o :) Nitram the Warrior <font color="purple" size="2">Let's be friends! :) 17:19, February 25, 2011 (UTC)

I'll read it all and give ye my opinion later, matey :) Nitram the Warrior <font color="purple" size="2">Let's be friends! :) 17:48, February 25, 2011 (UTC)

Kodo
About your character for The Wildcat's revenge. I think it's a very good idea, and I have to thank you. I wasn't quite sure where the story was going to go next. Adding a second villain is a great way to keep the story going. I might play around with his name and back story a little bit, but I will give you credit for the idea. I will try to use your ideas for him if you have them. Don't expect him soon, though. I have a lot to put in right now.

Thanks!

--I Am That Is, My sword will wield for me 20:53, February 25, 2011 (UTC)

P.S. Does he lead an army, or a gang, or something? I might have to give him some group of bad guys that he leads. Please leave me another message with this and any other details about him.

Sure!
Sure thing! what exactly do you want me to reveiw? Do you just want me to read it and give feed back?--<font color="Fuchsia" style="background:Black">Mad Maudie <font color="Fuchsia" style="background:Black">you dare to mess with me y'flaimin' salad swipers!?! 22:57, February 25, 2011 (UTC)

Ok, I read and commented. btw, do you mind reading my fanfic(s)? I like feedback too! ;) Just go to my blog page to find them.--<font color="Fuchsia" style="background:Black">Mad Maudie <font color="Fuchsia" style="background:Black">you dare to mess with me y'flaimin' salad swipers!?! 23:12, February 25, 2011 (UTC)

I read and commented, again, lol. It's goin' good! I gotta go now, Talk to ya later!!--<font color="Fuchsia" style="background:Black">Mad Maudie <font color="Fuchsia" style="background:Black">you dare to mess with me y'flaimin' salad swipers!?! 23:30, February 25, 2011 (UTC)

okay, even though I haven't read the book... yet <font color="Grey">Selound <font color="Grey" size="2"> REVENGE FOR THE FOXES 03:27, February 26, 2011 (UTC)

I updated again! Another update may soon follow about Slashclaw and Rori. Please comment!-<font color="Red " style="background:Silver">Segalia Riverstorm, Archer Ottermaid Warrioress   <font color="crimson" size="3"> Eph. 6:10 09:50, February 26, 2011 (UTC)

Okay, I looked at it briefly, so I probably didn't glean everything. It seems pretty good, not quite as good as JOM but rather good =)  Holly Thornblade The War to End All Wars- Have You Joined? 17:13, February 26, 2011 (UTC)

The part with Vilaya and the Cat. :) Nitram the Warrior <font color="purple" size="2">Let's be friends! :) 18:00, February 26, 2011 (UTC)

Hehe Cool Nitram the Warrior <font color="purple" size="2">Let's be friends! :) 18:06, February 26, 2011 (UTC)

I Think you should matey, I really like them :) Nitram the Warrior <font color="purple" size="2">Let's be friends! :) 18:12, February 26, 2011 (UTC)

Not sure, is your story, but it would be cool to have another sword fight. :) Nitram the Warrior <font color="purple" size="2">Let's be friends! :) 18:20, February 26, 2011 (UTC)

Hmmm, what to happen at redwall....maybe leah is showing drake some archery or something, and some of her friends think she is being babyish for "playing" with drake, who trys to defend her but gets knocked around, ya know, kinda like a bully situation. It might be an idea to play with. It's your story, so, whatever you want goes! :)--<font color="Fuchsia" style="background:Black">Mad Maudie <font color="Fuchsia" style="background:Black">you dare to mess with me y'flaimin' salad swipers!?! 18:35, February 26, 2011 (UTC)

YAY! I've been waiting for someone to try that! I'm no good at writeing that sorta thing meself, I'll belooking foward to it!--<font color="Fuchsia" style="background:Black">Mad Maudie <font color="Fuchsia" style="background:Black">you dare to mess with me y'flaimin' salad swipers!?! 18:46, February 26, 2011 (UTC)

This should help you out with most of the sig stuff. If you're totally confused you can bring your questions to me and I will try and help-<font color="Red " style="background:Silver">Segalia Riverstorm, Archer Ottermaid Warrioress   <font color="crimson" size="3"> Eph. 6:10 14:30, February 28, 2011 (UTC)

That's sorta how it came across. That should turn out very interesting though. They probably will end up becoming good friends by the end though (before she hopefully dies). I'll try and update soon and if I do I pretty sure it will include Slashclaw and Rori!-<font color="Red " style="background:Silver">Segalia Riverstorm, Archer Ottermaid Warrioress   <font color="crimson" size="3"> Eph. 6:10 20:23, February 28, 2011 (UTC)

No prob Matey. How is Vilaya going to hire mercenarys from Salamandastron? If you don't want to tell, that's totally cool, i'll just have to read like the rest of us. :)--<font color="Fuchsia" style="background:Black">Mad Maudie <font color="Fuchsia" style="background:Black">you dare to mess with me y'flaimin' salad swipers!?! 01:28, March 1, 2011 (UTC)

Awesome!
that's really cool! But, I'm not familiar with any of those songs. :P Sorry.-- Mad Maud I'm warning you, I'll jolly well be your friend!! 21:43, March 2, 2011 (UTC)

Oh, Yes! now that i read the lyrics, i think it exactly fits! I totally see where this is going. >;D-- Mad Maud I'm warning you, I'll jolly well be your friend!! 22:57, March 2, 2011 (UTC)

Obviously, you really know how to pick good songs!! Yes it fits! ;)fergot me sig...-- Mad Maud I'm warning you, I'll jolly well be your friend!!  23:07, March 2, 2011 (UTC)

Er.. I got 2 go now, Blarg, Bye! *Hugs*-- Mad Maud I'm warning you, I'll jolly well be your friend!! 23:09, March 2, 2011 (UTC)

End of Chapter 9! It's short but I think I'll be updating soon. Please comment and enjoy! Oh and please don't spoil Rori and Slashclaw for the others. I will give you credit for them. I hope they turned out well!-<font color="Red " style="background:Silver">Segalia Riverstorm, Archer Ottermaid Warrioress   <font color="crimson" size="3"> Eph. 6:10 16:53, March 3, 2011 (UTC)

Yeah! That's a good idea! Like, he could be her little friend, kinda like a big sister, and she's the one he goes back to at the end of the day, and talks to. So, naturally, she tells him what she heard!-- Mad Maud I'm warning you, I'll jolly well be your friend!! 01:11, March 4, 2011 (UTC)

REALLY?!?! YAYAYAYAYAYAYAYAYAY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! PLZ SOON!!!!!!!!!!!-- Mad Maud I'm warning you, I'll jolly well be your friend!! 02:51, March 5, 2011 (UTC) I'd love to.. but i have to go to bed... -.- I'll read it as soon as i can!!!!!-- Mad Maud I'm warning you, I'll jolly well be your friend!! 02:58, March 5, 2011 (UTC)

Hmm, well, i'll give ye some ideas, and you can think about them, and use your imagenation. I'm always glad to give suggestions, but i don't wanna, like, write it for you, ya know what i'm sayin'? so, for Drake, maybe he wants to look for Leah, to see if shemp is around, and she's hangin out with Shemp and some other dudes, and he hides and watches. Maybe another confrontation? Also, for future plots, you could decide wether Leah likes him, or she just wants to hang out with him cuz he's lonely. Maybe he's right, and she just wants to be his friend, or maybe she slowly starts to like him, Or maybe she's getting teased again, and little drake trys to come to her rescue.

For Jangus and vilaya, maybe they are traveling, and you could make up a conversation with them, maybe a back story for him? If i understand your "Lover Boy" theme correctly, she's reluctant to fall in love, and wont admit any  attraction to him, and he's just waiting to fall in love, correct? So, you could play up that theme.

I hope my way-to-long list rambling ideas helps! (If this just confuses you, i give you full licence to kick me);)...fergot me sig again...--<font color="Magenta ">Mad Maud   <font color="purple" size="2">I'm warning you, I'll bally well be your friend!!  15:23, March 5, 2011 (UTC)


 * ) (so you didn't decide to kick me, thats always a good sign...)--<font color="Magenta ">Mad Maud [[Image:Yikandmaudie.jpg| 100px | ]]  <font color="purple" size="2">I'm warning you, I'll bally well be your friend!!  15:30, March 5, 2011 (UTC)

YEAH! that's a really cool idea! Like he could pretend, and she'll be all confused! Good idea! (btw, i thing i have to go now, my lil' bor wants the computer. -.-)--<font color="Magenta ">Mad Maud   <font color="purple" size="2">I'm warning you, I'll bally well be your friend!!  16:19, March 5, 2011 (UTC)

How have ye been, Salem? :) Nitram the Warrior <font color="purple" size="2">Let's be friends! :) 16:02, March 7, 2011 (UTC)

Really? Coolio! A Gangsta! Can't wait to see how this plays out! btw, in case you didn't know, as of this wednesday, i wont be on the computer untill after easter. -.- So, don't be offended if i don't talk to you between those times.--<font color="Magenta ">Mad Maud   <font color="purple" size="2">I'm warning you, I'll bally well be your friend!!  00:37, March 8, 2011 (UTC)

I Absoflippinballyflaiminlutely envery-other-hare-ejactulation-i-can-think-of-love him!!!! Crazy hares are my faves! (Which means pretty much every hare, XD ) I love it when there's a crazy awesome hare in the story. it makes the whole thing more interesting. ;)<font color="Magenta ">Mad Maud   <font color="purple" size="2">I'm warning you, I'll bally well be your friend!!

Yeah! that would be really cool if he grouped up his ol' buddies and formed a resistance! The light brigade sounds coolio! What does francis wear? Regimental clothes, or normal stuff?<font color="Magenta ">Mad Maud   <font color="purple" size="2">I'm warning you, I'll bally well be your friend!!  01:09, March 8, 2011 (UTC)

Ok Sale! I'll probly read it after easter, cuz this is my last redwall wiki visit before i have to leave. Bye!! Talk to ye then Sale!--<font color="Magenta ">Mad Maud   <font color="purple" size="2">I'm warning you, I'll bally well be your friend!!  03:16, March 9, 2011 (UTC)

Hullo!
Sure! I'd be happy to, Salem. ;3 --Raeoki 01:25, March 10, 2011 (UTC)

I really like your suggestion! I'll spell it Grexx and add it to the Poll list and see if anyone else agrees with you. Thanks! --<font color="Gold" style="background:navy">Scotty Bluefleck, Mountain Hare from the Highlands <font color="Gold" style="background:navy">Matt 25:40  16:02, March 8, 2011 (UTC) 21:25, March 10, 2011 (UTC)

i would be absoloutely honored to review ur fanfic! Ariyh 00:08, March 11, 2011 (UTC)

Well, your story is very good. Probably better than mine. However, you may consider developing the cahracters a bit more. other than that, its phenomenal! Ariyh 00:19, March 11, 2011 (UTC)

O.K., I'll check it out. -- Cheetahstar  My Den  00:40, March 11, 2011 (UTC)

I like your character but if I do use her it will be much later in the tale, probably towards the end. I really don't much like using other peoples characters because I'm afraid I won't stay true to their creator's original conception of them; it would really annoy me if someone did that to one of mine. But thanks very much for the suggestion; I'll let you know when I make up my mind. I am about to submit the seventh chapter of Gingiverian, if you'd like to read it. The Black Shade is not in this chapter, but I will introduce him soon. We'll see if the name you submitted wins the poll!

God Bless, --<font color="Gold" style="background:navy">Scotty Bluefleck, Mountain Hare from the Highlands <font color="Gold" style="background:navy">Matt 25:40  16:02, March 8, 2011 (UTC) 00:57, March 11, 2011 (UTC)

Chaacter developement is simply telling something or everything about a certian character in an elongated fashion. For example, with my main character Natal, i told his story bit by bit, not all at once. Tell your reader a little bit more about drake and leah and their past relationship. these are just suggestions as to how to develpe your characters. s for when my story takes pace, it takes place after doowyte and just before the sable quean. i would love to eventually continue it over into the rouge crew, but that may not happen. Well here yu ave it, my opinion and a bit of a hint. Ihope you find this info helpful. Ariyh 01:29, March 11, 2011 (UTC)

reply
Sorry for not getting back to you on your last message. First, the review. I thought I did review it! I posted a comment, but I guess it didn't show up for some reason. I'll get to that ASAP. Second, about Kodo. I'm not quite sure how soon he'll be able to come in. I still have a lot to do before I can bring in another villain. We (well, my readers) still haven't even seen Terraz yet, the main bad guy. However, if you really want to see how he works out, I might be able to write something like a practice session with him. I wouldn't be part of the plot (unless it ends up being really good) but you would still get to see how he works out with the other characters and the rest of the storyline.

I will do the review as soon as I get a chance (I have to get off right as I post this) and please write me back about the "practice session" with Kodo.

I Am That Is, My sword will wield for me 01:42, March 11, 2011 (UTC)

great idea!
I think that's a great idea! I admit, I wasn't quite sure what I would've done if you had said yes, but now I do. I'll probably put it in a separate blog post, and I will update you as soon as it's done.

P.S. I commented on A little Night Music. Nice job.

I Am That Is, My sword will wield for me 13:31, March 11, 2011 (UTC)

Thanks for your comments! :D Check back often, because I update all the time! : ) -- Cheetahstar  My Den  01:10, March 12, 2011 (UTC)

Re: Your question.

I'm not entirely sure what you are asking. Do you mean, how do I personally develop character ideas; or do you mean, how does any writer do that, generally? --<font color="Gold" style="background:navy">Scotty Bluefleck, Mountain Hare from the Highlands <font color="Gold" style="background:navy">Matt 25:40  16:02, March 8, 2011 (UTC) 23:54, March 12, 2011 (UTC)

Answer
It would be an Honor, Salem. I'll read yer story and the updates soon. Chat to ya later. :D Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   02:12, March 13, 2011 (UTC)

PS:User blog:Nitram the Warrior/Kigam Tescer: Embodiment I have updated thif fanfic, if ye would like tae read it.

Well, I have a slight idea for the next part which if I got down to it I could expand on. I just did so well on the last chapter that I took a break. But since I have to stay home today I'll have time so I'll see what I can do. And the Abbess may talk about the possible war to Drake and Leah? I'm not entirely sure. Thanks!-<font color="Red " style="background:Silver">Segalia Riverstorm, Archer Ottermaid Warrioress   <font color="crimson" size="3"> Eph. 6:10 07:39, March 13, 2011 (UTC)

Update! A short revealing diary entry. And there's a poll. Please vote and comment!-<font color="Red " style="background:Silver">Segalia Riverstorm, Archer Ottermaid Warrioress   <font color="crimson" size="3"> Eph. 6:10 08:48, March 13, 2011 (UTC)

Well, since you gave me a spoiler on YOUR fanfic, It's only fair that I should give you one on mine. (Don't worry. I've been dying to tell someone. XD) For one thing, Venice dies at the end of A Warriors Legacy, and the third book is going to be called 'The Darkest Hour Is Just Before Dawn', But I don't know what the second book is going to be called. Have any ideas? -- Cheetahstar  My Den  15:58, March 13, 2011 (UTC)

Master and Commander? Good. But who's the master and who's the commander? -- Cheetahstar  My Den  18:11, March 13, 2011 (UTC)

Sure, why not? I really like that story :D Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   18:14, March 13, 2011 (UTC)

Mmmnnn... Maybe about then having to leave and meet a friend of hers, maybe? hehehe Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   18:26, March 13, 2011 (UTC)

PS: Have ye commented in one of me fanfics yet?

Okay. Oh, I updated my fanfic, so check it out. : ) -- Cheetahstar  My Den  18:27, March 13, 2011 (UTC)

I have seen the first episode, I really liked it and I'm thinking of watching it sooner or later. Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)  18:37, March 13, 2011 (UTC)

PS: Thank ye. wot did ye think of my suggestion?

Like, she is telling then they will have to leave and find a friend of hers that could help then save the abbey. Is Just a suggestion :) Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   18:47, March 13, 2011 (UTC)

PS: Do you like me new signature

No I have not. :P Wot do you think of Embodiment? Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)  18:56, March 13, 2011 (UTC)

Mah Brain is stuck on that too, matey. Sorry D: If I find anything, I'll tell ye. Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)  19:05, March 13, 2011 (UTC)

Cool and wacky, in a really great way :D Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   19:21, March 13, 2011 (UTC)

PS: If ye want updates for me fanfics, sign the Update list on mah profile. :)

Yes, they are pretty wacky, hehehehe. Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)  19:28, March 13, 2011 (UTC)

PS: Why did ye just deleted that message?

XD heheheh. Hope I can find anything else to talk about. Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)  20:13, March 13, 2011 (UTC)

PS: This message marks mah 600th edit. :D

Yiss,Yiss,Yiss!!! Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)  20:27, March 13, 2011 (UTC)

Somehow your Message was erased again XD. Fer yer answer, I'll think about it. Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)  21:04, March 13, 2011 (UTC)

I answered with me last post. Jewel is suppose to be a wolf in yer fanfic right? Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)  21:11, March 13, 2011 (UTC)

I'll see wot I can do, matey (About Salem being in Tales of Mattimeo) :) Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   18:42, March 14, 2011 (UTC)

I wanted to check out your pass-a-long, But TBT deleted it. Sorry. :P   -- Cheetahstar   1 2 3    00:29, March 16, 2011 (UTC)

Probably because fanfic goes on blogs. -- Cheetahstar  1 2 3    00:45, March 16, 2011 (UTC)

Re:Fan-fic
I can't find it. Could you send me a link? --<font color="white" style="background:blue">Scotty Bluefleck, Mountain Hare from the Highlands <font color="Turquoise" style="background:black">Matt 25:40  01:49, March 16, 2011 (UTC)

Sure
Go for it! the idea of a sports using a vole as a ball sound really interesting :) Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   14:15, March 17, 2011 (UTC)

I loved it :D Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   19:14, March 17, 2011 (UTC)

I'll give ye the review tomorrow. :) Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   22:41, March 17, 2011 (UTC)

Update:Tales of Mattimeo: Slagar's Legacy

 * First Update fer YE!!! Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   21:31, March 18, 2011 (UTC)

To make a poll...its easy, really. Just put ' ' at the top(without the apostrophes and the spaces), then put the question you want right under, then the answers right under that. When you've put all your questions down, put '< /poll >' (again, without the apostrophes and spaces), then hopefully it should work. I hope that helped :) Anyways, on to your writing. Well, like I said on 'A little night music', you need paragraphs when someone new speaks. Just press 'Enter' twice, that's what I do. Here and there, you also need punctuation. And capitalisation. And,(this is just my opinion, you don't have to follow it) I never use capitals for a whole word in a story. It just doesn't feel right to me. But you can use capitals, it's just a suggestion. Also, check your spelling. Most of the time, your spelling is quite good, but you spelt(in your comment) 'seperation' instead of 'separation'. And whenever you write a new chapter, read through it A LOT of times to make sure that it all makes sense. It helps. Well, I think that should cover it. Hope that lot doesn't make your brain explode. :) --<font color="navy" style="background:orchid">Laria Wavedeep <font color="green" size="2" style="background:goldenrod">I will find ye, wherever ye are... 01:20, March 19, 2011 (UTC)

I'm glad it did help :) Um, as for spoilers...if you really, really need to tell someone, then you can, but then everyone else would read my talk page and find out what happens. So I suggest you don't tell me. --<font color="navy" style="background:orchid">Laria Wavedeep <font color="green" size="2" style="background:goldenrod">I will find ye, wherever ye are... 03:00, March 19, 2011 (UTC)

Okay then. To make a poll you put poll in <> then your question and options (Just enter once no indent) then </> with a poll after the slash.

Did this help? Yes No

An example poll. Anyways, I hope your ideas come back...as do mine! -<font color="Red " style="background:Silver">Segalia Riverstorm, Archer Ottermaid Warrioress   <font color="crimson" size="3"> Eph. 6:10 08:39, March 19, 2011 (UTC)

Hi
Hello Salem the Cruel, nice name and sweet avatar by the way. *hits self* where are me manners? I'm Niko Banks pleased to meet you :) <font color="navy" style="background:Green">Niko Banks <font color="yellow" size="2" style="background:Blue">Whats up gangsta!, 01:45, March 20, 2011, (UTC)

Cool, you still watch Redwall the Tv Series, how do you do that, do you have the DVD's or it downloaded on your PC, or do you just watch it on You Tube? <font color="navy" style="background:Green">Niko Banks <font color="yellow" size="2" style="background:Blue">Whats up gangsta!, 01:57, March 20, 2011, (UTC)

My favorite bands are Green Day, Linkin Park, Nickleback, I'd like to see your poem, it sounds like it might be a good poem<font color="navy" style="background:Green">Niko Banks <font color="yellow" size="2" style="background:Blue">Whats up gangsta!, 02:20, March 20, 2011, (UTC)

Nice poem, I loved it, it was very moving and it wasen't that bad, the ryhms were ok, I hope to get another poem soon, you're a good poet :) *gives poem thumbs up* <font color="red" style="background:Green">Niko Banks <font color="yellow" size="2" style="background:Blue">Whats up gangsta!, 02:44, March 20, 2011, (UTC)

aww that's so pretty. Thanks for the idea, mate, I'll make a remake of the story some time (I wrote it awhile back) and add that in :D <font color="Grey">Selound <font color="Grey" size="2"> REVENGE FOR THE FOXES 02:41, March 20, 2011 (UTC)

Hey matey, I like your CivilWar, it was also touching and sorry it tuke me so long to respond, I was busy with something and now I am back on for the rest of the evening.<font color="red" style="background:Green">Niko Banks <font color="yellow" size="2" style="background:Blue">Whats up gangsta!, 09:43, March 20, 2011, (UTC)

Salem, hey, sorry for not giving ye feedback on the fanfic you send me, I'll give it to ye soon. By the by, I love Update in "A little night music."

PS: Ye misspelled Nitram's Last name, Is Rrav not Wrav, heheh. I really can't wait fer more. =D Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   02:20, March 21, 2011 (UTC)

Hey Salem I'm on right now, would you like to chat for a while, if you're not busy, matey.<font color="red" style="background:Green">Niko Banks <font color="yellow" size="2" style="background:Blue">Whats up gangsta!, 08:22, March 22, 2011, (UTC)

I love old movies, my favorite old movies seris, is Friday the 13th, its a great movie series, my other favorite is, The Godfather.<font color="red" style="background:Green">Niko Banks <font color="yellow" size="2" style="background:Blue">Whats up gangsta!, 11:23, March 22, 2011, (UTC)

Cool
Cool, what kind of Fanfiction is your story? is it a good one or a random one or really awsome?<font color="red" style="background:Green">Niko Banks <font color="yellow" size="2" style="background:Blue">Whats up gangsta!, 11:40, March 22, 2011, (UTC)

I don't think so
I don't think paragraph have definite lines while writing a story. Ye have seen mah stories, I don't have definite amount of sentences in mah second fic (And sometimes in me first one). :) Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   22:04, March 22, 2011 (UTC)

Maybe ye should fill the gaps of "one-sentecers" with more detail :D Just a suggestion Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   22:08, March 22, 2011 (UTC)

Cool, I have a fanfiction aswell, its on my blog page, so check it out when you have the chance, it's not really popular it acttaly sucks :( <font color="red" style="background:Green">Niko Banks <font color="yellow" size="2" style="background:Blue">Whats up gangsta!, 12:20, March 23, (UTC)

Questions? Did ye changed Nitram's last name on Purpose? :P

PS: If I think of something, I'll tell ye. I'm coming up with an idea right now XD Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   00:58, March 23, 2011 (UTC)

Ok
Thanks fer the answers :) I got an idea. Wot about making Nitram a kind of a teacher, at being a warrior, to Drake. This extremely annoys Francis XD since he cannot bring himself to thrust a rat. Wot do you think? Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   01:18, March 23, 2011 (UTC)

Hey Salem, did you get my previous message? <font color="red" style="background:Green">Niko Banks <font color="yellow" size="2" style="background:Blue">Whats up gangsta!, 03:38, March 23, 2011, (UTC)

'ow 'ave ye been, Salem? Puts friendly paw around Salem ;)  Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   15:16, March 25, 2011 (UTC)

Answer
Tightens his friendly grip "Can't tell a confirmation, But I can tell ye there is a great chance :D. By the By, did ye liked mah idea? Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   19:23, March 25, 2011 (UTC)

I was not annoyed at all, Salem. :) Ye still 'av not told me if ye liked the idea i send ye. :P Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   21:36, March 25, 2011 (UTC)

Salem, if ye like tae chat with friends. Maybe ye should join us on Speeqe. Here, some users from the redwall wiki come to chat and RPG. Niko is with us too. If ye like all that. Come to Redwall wars. Sing up at the protocol, and come join the fun, friend. :) Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   22:28, March 25, 2011 (UTC)

ye saw the message I left? (See above :P) Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   22:36, March 25, 2011 (UTC)

Hope...
Hope ye can maybe try to convince them. Ye are a nice person and we are nice people too. Hope there is a slight chance ye might be able to join us. Hugs Salem in sign of friednship ;) Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   22:50, March 25, 2011 (UTC)

Is that yer dream cast member for Jewels of Malkariss the movie? :P Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   23:03, March 25, 2011 (UTC)

Are ye going to talk to yore parents, Salem? Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)  23:12, March 25, 2011 (UTC)

Ofcouse, Is yore choice :) Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   23:17, March 25, 2011 (UTC)

Rubs paws together in anticipation I can't wait fer the update. ;)

PS: Sorry if it seemed like I was nagging ye. It really is yer choice if ye would like to join. :) Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   02:27, March 26, 2011 (UTC)

Salem?
Salem, are ye there? Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)  15:07, March 29, 2011 (UTC)

Coolz, so do I :D Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   23:44, March 29, 2011 (UTC)

"A little nights music" I vote fer :) Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   22:09, March 30, 2011 (UTC)

Snippets from the past >:) PS: I'm updating right now Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   22:15, March 30, 2011 (UTC)

Coolz :D Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   22:29, March 30, 2011 (UTC)

Sure :) Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   22:35, March 30, 2011 (UTC)

No :(
Sorry Salem, I have not read Eulalia yet. :( Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   00:48, April 4, 2011 (UTC)

Socializing
Hey! Nice socializing! Are you two (Nitram the Warrior/SalemtheCruel) B.F's in arms?

F.F 01:24, April 4, 2011 (UTC)

Re: Fan Fiction
Hi, not a fan fiction writer myself, I stopped that long ago. Sorry. -- <font color="Green">LordTBT  <font color="Green" size="2">Talk! 04:29, April 4, 2011 (UTC)

Sure!
Sure! I would love the spoiler, Salem :) Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   14:45, April 4, 2011 (UTC)

Mmm.... I'm not sure, Salem. I'll tell you if I think of anything. PS: I also consider ye one of me best friends in the Wikia ;) Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   23:32, April 4, 2011 (UTC)

Sure :)

PS: Did ye read the PS of last message? Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)  23:46, April 4, 2011 (UTC)

Sounds Promising :) Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   23:55, April 4, 2011 (UTC)

I would be delighted. :) Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   00:01, April 5, 2011 (UTC)

XD! Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)  00:11, April 5, 2011 (UTC)

XD Even more. :) Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   00:15, April 5, 2011 (UTC)

Okay. Here's what I've got.

Name: Chitzu

Gender: Male

Species: Fox

Weapon: Dagger with blade on both ends.

Howzat? Cheetah Fear Me!  14:30, April 6, 2011 (UTC)

Mmm... let me think about it. Ok Salem? Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)  15:15, April 6, 2011 (UTC)

SALEM! :)
Hey Salem, it's been a while since we last chatted, what have you been upto lately? keeping busy with alot of stuff, I bet.<font color="red" style="background:Green">Niko Banks <font color="yellow" size="2" style="background:Blue">Whats up gangsta!, 03:50, April 07, 2011, (UTC)

Hey Salem :) Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   22:36, April 7, 2011 (UTC)

You have a lot of blog post. XD Oh, and I updated a TON on A Ferret's Tale. Cheetahstar  <font color="purple" size="2">Ferrets Rule! 22:38, April 7, 2011 (UTC)

Cool name :) Can't right now, But I will later :)

PS: Hey, did ye ever considered the speeqe thing? Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)  22:44, April 7, 2011 (UTC)

Heheheheh :P Hope ye do it soon. (Sorry if I looks like I'm rushing ye) Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   22:51, April 7, 2011 (UTC)

Ofcourse. There has always been intelligent Vermin :)

That sounds Great XD Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   23:07, April 7, 2011 (UTC)

GTG, hear ya, Salem. :) Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   23:13, April 7, 2011 (UTC)

Re: Submission
Here's my suggestion.

Name: Fumbillo Swishtail (the Invisible One

Species: Woodmouse

Gender: Male

Color: Tan, almost golden fur; white throat, chest, and paws; black eyes

Wears: Half-green and half-violet vest(divided straight down the line of white buttons); white-green-and-violet harlequin patterned shirt and trousers; violet cloak (white on the inside), half-green-half-violet eyemask; black belt, gloves and stockings, floppy-brimmed black hat with a swan's feather in it

Weapons: mostly sleeping droughts/hypnotic formulas carried in a pouched belt about the waist; also a thin rapier, and a flute/blowpipe from which he fires sleeping-drought tipped darts

General Description: A young-adult mouse with no permanant home and no known background, Fumbillo Swishtail travels alone, wandering here and there. Due to his habit of appearing and disappearing at random, he has earned the nickname of "The Invisible One." He can climb better than most squirrels, and swim almost as well as an otter. A skilled musician, poet, dancer, and magician, he earns his food by occasionally entertaining other traveling beasts, or dropping in to goodbeasts homes to put on a show. He will rescue any creature he sees in danger; usually, by tricking the vermin or knocking them to sleep with his potions, though he will fight with his rapier when necessary. After assuring himself the rescued beasts are okay (sometimes traveling with them until they can get along witout his help), he usually vanishes without waiting for thanks.

You can play with/edit this character as much as you like, if you decide to use him at all.

God Bless,

'''--Scotty Bluefleck, Mountain Hare from the Highlands <font color="Gold" style="background:blue">Matt 25:40, 1 Cor. 13:13, Romans 12 ''' 00:55, April 8, 2011 (UTC)

Believe it or not, I started to like Redwall out of High assignment Last year :) Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   21:07, April 8, 2011 (UTC)

More Suggestions
I forget which season it's supposed to be, so here's four suggestions.


 * Spring of the Lazy Butterfly


 * Summer of the Shining Sun


 * Autumn of the Golden Crowns (this refers to treetops)


 * Winter of the Grey Winds

God Bless,

'''--Scotty Bluefleck, Mountain Hare from the Highlands <font color="Gold" style="background:blue">Matt 25:40, 1 Cor. 13:13, Romans 12 ''' 02:27, April 9, 2011 (UTC)

No, thank you Salem. Not this time. :) Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   11:19, April 9, 2011 (UTC)

Help?
Salem, ye want help with separating paragraphs? I think I may be able to help you, if ye want the help. :) Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   15:52, April 9, 2011 (UTC)

Alright, I'll copy and paste a chapter in word pad and separate the paragraphs, then I'll send ye that copy and see if ye like it, Ok? :) Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   15:58, April 9, 2011 (UTC)

I'll organized it, then send it to ye here. The you can delete it so you don't take up so much space :) Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   17:43, April 9, 2011 (UTC)

I haven't read that one yet ^^; I'm afraid --<font color="Grey">Selound <font color="Grey" size="2"> REVENGE FOR THE FOXES 06:07, April 10, 2011 (UTC)

Re:Acalle
If I do decide to work her in, I have two questions.


 * 1) 1... May I make her a cross fox (one with black and rust patched fur; this is a real-life fur mutation of the red fox breed) instead of a black one? There is going to be a loosely organized, not-really-a-proper-band-or-horde group of independent and rather impudent-natured crossfoxes coming in to the story within the next chapter or two.


 * 1) 2...May I change the spelling of her name to Akalle? It would seem to fit better with the other names of the self-named Krozfoxx people (Zyxxa, Kaia, Zaikee, Layka, and so on).

WORD OF WARNING: If I did work her in it would probably only be for a short scene.

God Bless,

'''--Scotty Bluefleck, Mountain Hare from the Highlands <font color="Gold" style="background:blue">Matt 25:40, 1 Cor. 13:13, Romans 12 ''' 01:44, April 11, 2011 (UTC)

P.S. I kind of need to know this before I write the next installment of the story. If it is not OK to insert her here I probably won't put her in the story until much later.

I finally updated! It's long and...interessant. Enjoy and please comment!-<font color="Red " style="background:Silver">Segalia Riverstorm, Archer Ottermaid Warrioress   <font color="crimson" size="3"> Eph. 6:10 17:35, April 11, 2011 (UTC)

Sorry Salem, I have been busy fer a while, I'm working on the last chapter, then I'll send it to see if ye like it. If ye do, I'll separate the whole story fer ye :) Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   22:54, April 12, 2011 (UTC)

Thank ye :) Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   23:01, April 12, 2011 (UTC)

Later, I'm working on yer thing right now. :) Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   23:04, April 12, 2011 (UTC)

Nods Just like I'm not rushing the day when ye come to speeqe, if it will happen :) Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   23:07, April 12, 2011 (UTC)

Chapter
Here is Chapter 12. Is not finished, but I wanna see how you like how it is. :) Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   21:21, April 14, 2011 (UTC)

The night of the minstrel had finally arrived. Drake and Leah were en route to Indigo Crossing via the forest. Since Ambry already had plans at Redwall; Nitram secretly decided to tag along instead. Along the way he’d taken advantage of the long way up to Indigo Crossing to teach Drake and Leah better ways to shoot with arrows. So Nitram would walk alongside them, and say to whoever it was with the bow:


 * “All right. You tilt your head up likeways, make sure the arrow won’t fall out, then you pull back and let ‘er go!”

Even Drake, who was new to bows and arrows did not have a particularly hard time catching on.

“You really got Francis mad,” Drake said, rolling his eyes as they trotted down the forest paths strewn with pine needles.

Nitram gazed up at the starry sky. “I know.” The rat chuckled to himself. “Poor old hare hadn’t had such a good time with rats in that…. Regiment, what was it called?” the rat wracked his brain.

“The Light Brigade?” Leah offered.

Nitram grinned triumphantly. “Yes, that’s it! The Light Brigade!”

A crow cawed in the distance. Leah stared up at the night sky.

“You don’t really get nights like this anymore.” She commented.

Drake and Nitram gave each other looks. It seemed they could both relate to the night scenery as well; all was tranquil: The sky was painted a soft blue-black, crickets chirped in the bushes along the side-paths, pine needles were strewn along the trails, and a few night birds chirped softly in the bushes. It was a perfect night.

“This IS a night to remember.” Drake agreed wholeheartedly.

Nitram gazed up at the stars and uttered one single word “Aye.”.

Not too long later the lights at Indigo Crossing were in view. The three animals stood on a ridge overlooking the town, called Martin’s Ridge by the locals. Legend had it that Martin the Warrior had gazed at the then-new town from that very ridge; along with his unlikely companions Gonff the Mousethief and Albertine and Gingivere Greeneyes. So as they descended down from the ridge; Drake, (as he knew the story by heart) told Nitram the legend of Martin’s Ridge.

“That’s right great” Nitram commented as they went down. “t’is Martin creature must have been a great ole beast”

Drake nodded, but Leah said

“It is and was, but in Indigo Crossing, they’re used to distant echoes of history.” Drake nodded. Leah was definitely right; Indigo Crossing WAS an old, historic town after all….

Drake squinted, noticing a dark shape jumping up and down and yelling at the bottom of the ridge. “Nitram, Leah, look at this. I think that’s Francis down there.”

Leah sighed, exasperated.

Drake slapped his paw on his temple.

Nitram grimaced and headed back up the ridge. “If yew two’ll excuse me I’ll be going.”

Before Leah could say one of her typical clever remarks, Drake hurriedly asked Nitram “Where?”

Nitram shrugged. “Not too far off. I’ll come into Indigo Crossing through the south side of the forest. That way a certain someone down below won’t notice me.”

Before Drake nor Leah could do or say anything else, the rat was gone, bounding off towards the woods once again.

They had a very annoyed-looking Francis waiting for them down below. The two young ones begrudgingly climbed down to Francis, who was shouting things like “How dare you scalawags associate with vermin!” Or “What in the name of Warrior’s Honor were you doin’ with that bally old rat?”. His incesant chattering was unberable to the young creatures

“I can explain everything!” Drake finally exclaimed, to put an end to Francis’s crazed shouting.

Leah gave Drake an amused look that said "So you think you can pull this off?"

Drake sighed. Leah wasn’t usually ornery but when she was… WATCH OUT! Drake shot her an angry look quickly, and then resumed arguing with Francis. After a short time he was able to conceive a tale that satisfied the hare, and Francis walked off shortly afterwards.

As soon as they were alone, Drake grabbed Leah and dragged her over to a nearby tree. “What were you doing, abandoning me like that?” He hissed.

Leah just flattened her back against the tree, saying only “I wanted to see how you’d do against Francis.”

Drake was disappointed at the squirrels indifference “Leah, we’ve been friends for a while now, and friends are supposed to stick up for each other!”

She simply shrugged and walked away, back towards the path to Indingo Crossing.

Fifteen minutes later, Drake, Leah, Nitram (Nitram and Francis sat as far away from each other as possible.) and some animals from town were sitting around a bonfire. As the fire cracked and sparkled, it sent tiny flames into the night sky, burning ashes. After a while, a dog the color of the ashes wearing a burgundy cloak stepped out from one of the horse-drawn wagons parked nearby. The small crowd began to murmur excitably. “Ladies and gentlebeasts, my name is Abel of the Scraggway Traveling Minstrel and I can give you news and rumors from all over the nation.”

Immediately several males began demanding for war news, and so Abel cleared his throat melodramatically, looked around, and said “Well, the Royal House of Salamandastron and the planters down in Malkariss are still at war.” A steady stream of groans rose up from the crowd. “Travel to either of those areas will not be possible for the next three weeks.” Still more groans.

The rest of the evening was nearly as fun as a nameday, when the seasons are named. The audience gathered around the fire listened with rapture to southern and northern folk songs, watched abridged plays as well as bouts of slapstick humor by the minstrel’s traveling company. Finally, as the fire dwindled down to ashes in the pit, Leah and Francis headed back to Redwall. Nitram would take Drake to Redwall, before turning back and eventually going himself. That was the plan, but it wasn’t followed accordingly……

Before long Drake and Nitram decided to take the shortcut; down winding paths and trails Drake had never seen before. After a while they came to a dead end in a darkened meadow. A ring of pine trees towered above them, and it seemed darker than usual in this part of the woods….

Nitram grimaced. “Damn.” He cursed, and handed Drake his bow. “You’ll need that for protection. You never know what might jump out at you in Skelton’s Glade.”

“Huh?” Drake was puzzled. He had heard talk of Skelton’s Glade but had never actually been there before.

Nitram produced a dagger from his cloak pocket so that he had a weapon too. “They say the place’s haunted. At first I thought it was just stories to keep babes an’ little children in line, but it ain’t. I’ve heard tell from more ‘n a few animals claimin’ the ghosts of Old Man Skelton and his greedy clan prowl the meadow at night.” Nitram gestured around the meadow. “They say Skelton used to have a plantation here. Exactly where it lies nobeast knows. His family was fabulously rich- refugees from another plantation down south from the Border War. You were probably a babe then, but I remember it well enough. It was a lot of disagreement over slavery and the like if I remember correctly. Anyhow, Skelton and his clan are buried here, and they were the evilest pack of stubborn sables you’d ever want to meet. Don’t worry though, Drake. I’ve got your back.”

Drake nodded. The gazed up at the sky that seemed to darken by the glade’s presence. “How hard will it be to get out?” He asked, sort-of-worried.

Nitram shook his head. “Depends.” He answered vaguely.

“Nitram,” Drake whispered a moment later as they started across the wide meadow. “The ground’s starting to feel… Strange.”

Nitram nodded. “Aye, mate. I feel it too.”

The ground was indeed beginning to feel strange; soft, squishy under the two rodent’s paws, like quicksand. Drake’s eyes widened as his right hind leg disappeared into the dirt, then his left. Quickly his lower body became enveloped as well.

“It’s like bloody quicksand!” Nitram exclaimed. Drake was too stunned to think of anything to say as they were sucked down, down, down, into the earth…..

“DRAAAAKE!” Drake heard Nitram screaming his name as they fell onto a soft floor with a THUD!

They were now in a dirt walled room under the ground. Drake looking up, eyes narrowed because of the dimness of the room.

“Where are we?”

Seven stone slabs were at one corner of the room, nothing else decorated the gloomy scenery.

Nitram shrugged, baffled. “Your guess is as good as mine, matey, but I reckon this is Skelton’s tomb.”

Drake felt gooseflesh rising at the back of his neck, although he was certain there was no such thing as ghosts.

“Come on!” Drake said, wandering over to the coffins. “Let’s look and see if there’s an exit.”

Nitram dashed over to his friend, wary not to trip on any uneven floor in his haste “Capital idea.”

Before they began looking, Drake noticed old, dust-covered writing on the huge stone coffin nearest him. Curious, he brushed it off to read the inscription:

EPHRAIM JEBADIAH SKELTON;

PATRIARCH OF THE SKELTON CLAN

THE WINTER OF SHINING ICE – THE SPRING OF THE YELLOW DAISIES

AGED 75 YEARS, 3 MONTHS, 7 DAYS

Drake breathed, nudging Nitram “Nitram, look at this. The Old Man’s grave…”.

“Blimey….” The rats eyes widened, feeling uncomfortable around the caskets.

“Before we find that exit….. Let’s get a look at those other coffins, see who else’s buried here. So Drake set about brushing away more dust on the coffin to Ephraim’s left. He read loud and clear “‘Saul Greengate Skelton, son of Ephraim, The Summer of the Golden Hawk, The Autumn of the Early Leaf, aged 39 years, five months, six days.”

Nitram grimaced as he read from the grave to Ephraim’s right “‘Samson Ernest Greengate, The Autumn of the Black Oak, The Autumn of the Early Leaf, aged 33 years, one month, two days….”

Nitram gave Drake a look. They were both thinking the same thing: Murder!

Gulping, Nitram made his way over to the grave next to Samson’s “ ‘Amanora Greengate Skelton ’ ” Nitram slowly read aloud, struggling to decipher the elegant, curling script. “ ‘The Spring of the Thorn Birds, the Winter of the Great Snowstorm. Amanora. Ephraim’s mate…..”

As Nitram stared shock at the coffin panel, Drake leaned heavily into the wall. He pulled back as part of the wall pulled back with a sliding sound! Nitram immediately came over, and a set of dust-covered steps led beneath the ground, far deeper than the tomb.

Drake felt adventure surging through his body. Leaving behind any thoughts lurking danger or paranormal terrors, he put his paw on the first step swiftly and beckoned to the rat. “Let’s go.”

Nitram grinned at young bold creature. “With ye all the way, matey. Onwards we go!” Five minutes later Nitram and Drake were hopelessly lost in a dark, underground corridor with no light to guide them. It was light enough to distinguish the handy work done ground, cultivation made in bygone seasons. There where even traces of some unidentifiable herb.

“An underground plantation…” Nitram muttered, shaking his head. “Old Ephraim must’ve been off his rocker when he dug this place out!”

Drake wandered ahead of Nitram in the dark, squinting as they entered towards what appeared to be a lit chamber. “Call me crazy Nitram, but I think we’re going towards light.”

Nitram had swiftly caught up with Drake. His pace matching that of the mouse “Drake, I’ve seen so much of this place, now nothing surprises me anymore.”

Drake couldn’t have agreed more. The two animals both ran into the light without another word between them.

Re:Akalle
Just to let you know, I've updated the story. Akalle is not in this chapter, but she will be in there soon, I promise. '''--Scotty Bluefleck, Mountain Hare from the Highlands <font color="Gold" style="background:blue">1 Cor. 13:13''' 22:04, April 14, 2011 (UTC)

Glad ye liked it :). I'll be helping ye separate paragraphs for now on if ye would like it. (With a few edits or two, I won't destroy yer inventive genius).  Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   22:06, April 14, 2011 (UTC)

PS: I also added a little detail to yer scenerary.

Ummm?
Did ye already re upload? becasue it something seems to be wrong with the chapter. Oh and, Well, most of the whole story needs a little separating and cleaning. Hope I'm not being too critical, but most of your chapters consist on three or more run on paragraphs. Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)  22:19, April 14, 2011 (UTC)

Did ye copy and paste it? Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)  22:26, April 14, 2011 (UTC)

I see... But if ye check it right now. Everything has been put back together, and a chuck from the beggining is Missing D: Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   22:31, April 14, 2011 (UTC)

But the stuff is still glued together. Mmmm. Maybe if you copy and paste every paragraph individually.. Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)  22:44, April 14, 2011 (UTC)

Depends. Now I'll start from top to botton. I'll do it when I have updated one of me fics. :) Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   22:49, April 14, 2011 (UTC)

Hey Salem, hows it going my friend, you must be keeping busy I bet, So are you looking for the weekend, the best part of the week :P <font color="red" style="background:Green">Niko Banks <font color="yellow" size="2" style="background:Blue">Whats up gangsta!, 12:59, April 15, 2011, (UTC)

I'm doing well thanks, just been very busy and all, ain't we all busy, I really need to update my fanfic, IDK if you have read it or not, but still, I need to update, even though it's a waste of my time because no one comments on it.<font color="navy" style="background:Green">Niko Banks <font color="yellow" size="2" style="background:Blue">Whats up gangsta!, 01:20, April 15, 2011, (UTC)

Great :D! Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)  23:26, April 14, 2011 (UTC)

Hi back! How are you doing? Holly Thornblade The War to End All Wars- Have You Joined? 09:53, April 15, 2011 (UTC)

Wanted Freedom - FanFic
Hey there! Check out the beginning of my first fanfic. User blog:ForrestFighter/Wanted Freedom

<font color="red" style="background:Green">F.F. - Mossflowerrrrr!!! <font color="red" size="2">Ps. 82:3-4  13:52, April 15, 2011 (UTC)

Hey Salem, you want to chat for a while? I'm not doing much at the momment.<font color="navy" style="background:Green">Niko Banks <font color="yellow" size="2" style="background:Blue">Whats up gangsta!, 12:09, April 16, 2011, (UTC)

Sweet, tomorrow I have pottery, its going to be awsome :) gives Salem a mug that says "Salem rocks" in rainbow colors I enjoy pottery, have you ever done pottery before? <font color="navy" style="background:Green">Niko Banks <font color="yellow" size="2" style="background:Blue">Whats up gangsta!, 12:17, April 16, 2011, (UTC)

Pretty weird, but not completely weird, the only thing that I find weird is ummm, I don't find much stuff weird, so are you looking forward for the weeken, Salem? <font color="navy" style="background:Green">Niko Banks <font color="yellow" size="2" style="background:Blue">Whats up gangsta!, 12:30, April 16, 2011, (UTC)

You weird? whats weird about you, Salem? you're a nice and awsome friend if you ask me. hugs Salem <font color="navy" style="background:Green">Niko Banks <font color="yellow" size="2" style="background:Blue">Whats up gangsta!, 12:40, April 16, 2011, (UTC)

I'm the first to sign your friends section :P I bet more people will join soon, Salem.<font color="navy" style="background:Green">Niko Banks <font color="yellow" size="2" style="background:Blue">Whats up gangsta!, 12:53, April 16, 2011, (UTC)

No today, but soon. PS: Today is by Birthday :) Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   22:59, April 15, 2011 (UTC)

I hope you don't mind me asking you this, but what makes you weird? to tell you the truth, I am weird myself.<font color="navy" style="background:Green">Niko Banks <font color="yellow" size="2" style="background:Blue">Whats up gangsta!, 01:05, April 16, 2011, (UTC)

Me, the only thing that makes me weird is, that I was born with Autism, which is cool in its own way, what you do is not weird, and who ever says you are weird doesen't know the real you.<font color="navy" style="background:Green">Niko Banks <font color="yellow" size="2" style="background:Blue">Whats up gangsta!, 01:17, April 16, 2011, (UTC)

Anything for a friend.
Anything for a friend like you, when ever you have a rough day at school, just come and chat to me about it, I am here for you my friend :) <font color="navy" style="background:Green">Niko Banks <font color="yellow" size="2" style="background:Blue">Whats up gangsta!, 01:30, April 16, 2011, (UTC)

I like scary movies, my favorite scary movie is Friday the 13th, and my favorite comedy movie is, Rush Hour, its really funny lol, and my favorite sci fi film is Starship Troopers and my favorite Animated film is Fantastic Mr Fox, that film is so funny lol, what is your favorite films ? <font color="navy" style="background:Green">Niko Banks <font color="yellow" size="2" style="background:Blue">Whats up gangsta!, 01:36, April 16, 2011, (UTC)

They sound like awsome films, I have watched the Secret of NIMH 1 and 2, but I think 1 is better, because it's a classic, the only thing I like about The Secret or NIMH 2 is, that it has great songs in it, but the bad thing is, that it is not really based on the original film.<font color="navy" style="background:Green">Niko Banks <font color="yellow" size="2" style="background:Blue">Whats up gangsta!, 01:53, April 16, 2011, (UTC)

I agree both films were awsome, I have both on DVD, I just wish they made a third film, now that would be awsome, really awsome :) do you think they should make a third Secret of Nimh film? Niko BanksWhats up gangsta!, 02:10, April 16, 2011, (UTC)

Cool idea, I would love to read that fan fic, speaking of fan fics, have you read my fan fic? <font color="navy" style="background:Green">Niko Banks <font color="yellow" size="2" style="background:Blue">Whats up gangsta!, 02:25, April 16, 2011, (UTC)

Thats ok :) Hmmm, we should really think about this, how about the story starts when Martin The Warrior bumps into one of the rats, and at first he thinks they are bad, and almost starts a fight with them. how does that sound for a beginning for the crossover? <font color="navy" style="background:Green">Niko Banks <font color="yellow" size="2" style="background:Blue">Whats up gangsta!, 02:40, April 16, 2011, (UTC)

I was thinking the same thing, are you my long lost sister? hehehe jk anyway, it totally does remind me, anyway that song is awsome steals the song from Tim Brisby, making him cry Thanks skinny! I think the song is really well made.<font color="navy" style="background:Green">Niko Banks <font color="yellow" size="2" style="background:Blue">Whats up gangsta!, 02:59, April 16, 2011, (UTC)

IDK, maybe we should both think of a name and once we choose a name, we'll name it the name we give it, anyway I GTG now, thanks for the chat and lets chat some more tomorrow when I get on again (hugs) <font color="navy" style="background:Green">Niko Banks <font color="yellow" size="2" style="background:Blue">Whats up gangsta!, 03:22, April 16, 2011, (UTC)

Salem, ye gave me a message that was suppose to be for Forrest Fighter XP Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   01:34, April 16, 2011 (UTC)

Gtg, Bye Salem. :) Nitram Roy Rrav <font color="Gray" size="2"> vermins can be naive too :)   01:44, April 16, 2011 (UTC)

sorry, not right now. I have a lot of things to catch up on --<font color="Grey">Selound <font color="Grey" size="2"> REVENGE FOR THE FOXES 02:50, April 16, 2011 (UTC)

Listening to music while robbing your house, jk I'm just listening to music while chatting to you :) and what are you upto? <font color="navy" style="background:Green">Niko Banks <font color="yellow" size="2" style="background:Blue">Whats up gangsta!, 11:20, April 16, 2011, (UTC(

Cool idea
Hmmm, good idea for a title, I think that is a perfict name for the Fan fiction, So what are your plans for the fan fic, so far? <font color="navy" style="background:Green">Niko Banks <font color="yellow" size="2" style="background:Blue">Whats up gangsta!, 11:30, April 16, 2011, (UTC)

Ooooh, sounds exsiting, you must of been thinking of this fan fic for the last few hours, I can actually imagin Mrs. Brisby living in Redwall Abbey and becoming friends with its residents and some of the locals of Mossflower.<font color="navy" style="background:Green">Niko Banks <font color="yellow" size="2" style="background:Blue">Whats up gangsta!, 11:50, April 16, 2011, (UTC)

I can imagin that, it will be like when Harry met Lloyd, yeah, this is alot of fun, we seem to defanally think alike, what do you think?<font color="navy" style="background:Green">Niko Banks <font color="yellow" size="2" style="background:Blue">Whats up gangsta!, 12:00, April 17, 2011, (UTC)

Thats a great idea, here is how I see it, he joins their side, but what Jenner and Cluny don't know, is that Martin is acting out as a spy for Timmy and the Redwallers, which will make the story intrasting, what do you think of the idea, Salem? <font color="navy" style="background:Green">Niko Banks <font color="yellow" size="2" style="background:Blue">Whats up gangsta!, 12:20, April 17, 2011, (UTC)

I'm glad you like the idea :P So, which characters will you be putting in the fan fic, between Redwall and The Secret of NIMH? <font color="navy" style="background:Green">Niko Banks <font color="yellow" size="2" style="background:Blue">Whats up gangsta!, 12:36, April 17, 2011, (UTC)

Cool idea, I can see the GOUSIM now as they meet the Brisbies, and can you imagin the Gousim meeting the Rats of Thorn Valley, now that will make the story very fun and intrasting to read, so do you think there should be abit of humor in the fan fic? <font color="navy" style="background:Green">Niko Banks <font color="yellow" size="2" style="background:Blue">Whats up gangsta!, 01:00, April 17, 2011, (UTC)

Cool, I was thinking that for a joke, when Matthias finds out Cluny's not dead, Matthias says "What does it take to kill you, a safe?" hehe I think that would be funny, what do you think of the idea? <font color="navy" style="background:Green">Niko Banks <font color="yellow" size="2" style="background:Blue">Whats up gangsta!, 01:23, April 17, 2011, (UTC)

Cool, the idea just came to me, really. I kinda have the neck for comedy, I watch alot of comedy shows and cartoons for ideas for my fan fics and stories. <font color="navy" style="background:Green">Niko Banks <font color="yellow" size="2" style="background:Blue">Whats up gangsta!, 02:00, April 17, 2011, (UTC)

Thats a pretty cleaver idea, it would probably be easier if they did that at night, so they don't get cought messaging each other, what do you think of the idea? <font color="navy" style="background:Green">Niko Banks <font color="yellow" size="2" style="background:Blue">Whats up gangsta!, 02:07, April 17, 2011, (UTC)

Sure thing Salem, I'd like to see what we have come up with so far :) <font color="navy" style="background:Green">Niko Banks <font color="yellow" size="2" style="background:Blue">Whats up gangsta!, 02:27, April 17, 2011, (UTC)

Cool, I like the beginning so far, I hope to read the fanfic soon, we make a great team, coming up with ideas for this fan fic. <font color="navy" style="background:Green">Niko Banks <font color="yellow" size="2" style="background:Blue">Whats up gangsta!, 02:47, April 17, 2011, (UTC)

Ok :)
Ok Salem, take your time with coming up with ideas, if you need any help with ideas, just ask, ok? <font color="navy" style="background:Yellow">Niko Banks <font color="yellow" size="2" style="background:Blue">Whats up gangsta!, 03:00, April 17, 2011, (UTC)

YAY :P it's good to have you back, Salem, so hows your day been? I hope it hasen't been raining like it has been here where I live.<font color="navy" style="background:Green">Niko Banks <font color="yellow" size="2" style="background:Blue">Whats up gangsta!, 07:10, April 17, 2011, (UTC)