User blog comment:Abriella Laterose/Maid's Quest/@comment-5156759-20130707025039

First off, welcome to the wiki! It's always nice to see new users! Your fan fiction has got off to quite a good start, I always like villains who don't seem like complete idiots, and Nazar seems to be managing the task. A few nitpicky details though;

"Their enemies outnumbered them two to six" Typically, when you say that their enemies outnumbered them, you start with the bigger number first, and the smaller one next. I still get your point, but the ratio is backwards.

Also, it really helps readers if you indent after every line of dialogue; I know it's a pain (from my own fanfiction) but it really does help.

Finally, don't know if you already know this or not, but if you want to reply to one specific person in the bottom right corner