User blog comment:Shieldmaiden/Battle for Southsward/@comment-1031934-20091012032123

Sm, you've inspired me to take a eye towards my own fanfiction.. I'll be reading this a chapter a night. So I read Chapter 1 tonight.

I have to say, the prologue takes my attention right away, but it seemed to slow down at the middle of chapter one. Keep the attention up, not necessarily by action, but by something.

Very good, otherwise, though. I'm enjoying Taryn's mind-talk, and love the way (in my eyes) she's so protective over hurting Deyna. Very cute.

Chrispies!