User blog comment:SaynaSLuke/A War from Inside/@comment-25720178-20150403231515/@comment-7662967-20150404022323

I know .. DX

No .. it's really actually Lilly (forgive me, I'm making this fit with 'Accused' as I go ;) You're writing for Lilly XD (Thalia might show up .. once. When she escapes I guess ;3

Ehhh .. you're right, I never noticed XP crazy coincidence .. Fragorl has them cause she was part of the blue hordes once, and Kinta cause .. um .. they looked the best .. ;D

I know .. she's sating the total obvious (but maybe cause she knows more of what's going on then we think) *shudders*

Yea .. they can be hard to write, trust me XD Well, I really like your style, it's deep and reflective, (like I try to make mine) but I've sometimes found once I've repeated a character's thoughts three times, it's best to move on (you don't do that, actually I've never seen that in your writing) Well, it's very important to have both POV and action, and my greatest advise is; don't be afraid to write things that are .. a little bloody. You know .. if you don't give gory descriptions, some violence is ok (I have trouble with thinking it's going to be too gory too .. but that intense scene with say .. Ferran and the Icetor Flowers of Tsarmina's last battle .. weren't too bad .. were they?) My biggest problem is in my ships, I don't like to portray all that much .. you know .. romance. I'm getting better but .. sometimes I still fail when I could have made it more dramatic cause it embarrasses me for some reason. Not that it's bad .. but just .. yea.) And this whole Xemx/Roderick thing scares me some .. I've never written along those lines and don't like writing them .. but how else was I going to do it? So I stuck my neck out there *sigh*

Like I said, POVs make the reader feel more in touch with the characters so they're very important XD There's a ballence of course, but I don't thing you're bad about it. However, if you do, you could focus on the action a little more .. and you'll inevitably get POVs at the same time, if that's what you're inclined to write (like me) :D It just takes practice .. I'm still far from perfect at it, I know what you mean XD

You're welcome! I will finish this week! I must! Oh yea ... and an early Happy Easter! <3 :D =^^=