User blog comment:Varkanax39/The Last Champion: A Novel of Redwall (fanfic)/@comment-1427879-20120627230530

Did my comment not post? Oh well...the first paragraph was confusing, possibly due to some missing words. There were also some repeating phrases throughout the chapter that were repetitive...perhaps you could replace them with synonyms. I liked the Tirian/Scythe fight. It looks like Raya and Rodan are both quickly advancing towards orphanhood though. Maybe the disappearance of Raya is how she'll end up possibly aiding the Twisted Flame. KIU!