User blog comment:ForrestFighter/Wanted Freedom/@comment-2207385-20110423205401

ahhh what a good story to read this is, good job on expressing the feelings of the characters, I could really feel the anger Firlow had when he found the hares, nice job! and what a surpise! that the villian is a hedgehog, can't wait to see what kind of a character he is. Also may I suggest that you change the way the paragraphs are, that you seperate dialogue and action seperatly so they don't interfere with each other, it also makes the story easier to read. Good job and keep it coming!!

Happy storytelling!!