User blog comment:TheTragedyofE/The Mossflower Patrol/@comment-7662967-20150812163328

I think you've got a good start here! :) I like the idea of a sort of Long Patrol in Mossflower. I also wonder at the squirrel saying it was soon to be forgotten, and why it was. I'll check to see if you update :D

The only thing I'll say constructive criticism wise .. and understand I'm not trying to be overly judgmental, I did this at first too .. but you might want to make a new paragraph every time someone speaks. One big chunk of dialog makes it a little hard to read, just saying ;)

But either way, that's just a superficial detail. Good job so far :) KIU!