User blog comment:Zoso159/Outcasts and The Forrgoten/@comment-1884658-20100423213330

The storyline is very good, but it's difficult to read because - no offence - it's one big runon sentence. It helps if you start a new paragraph every time the speaker changes. If you're already doing that, it has something to do with the text encoding: you have to push enter twice. If it is really hard and you want to focus on the story, you can contact one of the other users to correct grammar and stuff. I'll be happy to help if you want. If you have any questions about this which makes very little sense to me so probably won't make any sense to you, feel free to ask.