User blog comment:IllusionOfOblivion/A Twisted Reality/@comment-2142396-20150108200600

Wow, that’s truly an amazing story! I love your attention to details: even minor characters like Swiftblade or Firestreak were described in great details, and you don’t forget about little aspects like mentioning Zev having to hide his ears while masquerading as vermin or Swiftblade’s pirates not having enough time to search the ship, as well as two rats left behind. You write great descriptions of scenery, something I have problems with.

I like that Zev and Riah don’t take needless risks, but in the same time brave enough for an escape attempt. The green-fletched arrow seems to be a pretty important symbol for both Riah, Cerberus and Redwallers, that’s interesting… Illusion is quite a mysterious character… She’s treading on a dangerous ground now, but she’s a smart one; I’m almost sure she can convince Cerberus of her being a real seer. I think so far Zevquain is my favourite, I like how he’s both clever and funny in a typical hare fashion; it’s cool that he’s Woodsorrel descendant as well.

Cerberus is a truly menacing and scary villain. When wolves appear in fan fiction, they can sometimes lose that air of menace and power, but that’s certainly not the case there. The newly-discovered land is a promising plot twist, as well as the squirrel slave. Due to his patterned pelt and him coming from a new land, I had a feeling he’s not really a squirrel, but some other species like chipmunk, or maybe some subspecies of squirrel. That’s a random guess, I know, but that’s how I feel.

It’s hard to guess what’s happening at Salamandastron, but it’s very intriguing. I hope that the Major’s family is all right, though I’m bracing myself for the worst… My only note is that in chapter 2 Lady Lily says that Zev’s father’s name is Aquain Woodsorrel, but later his name is Dustscut Woodsorrel. Is that a mistake or simply two parts of Major’s full name?

Keep the story up and update me, please!