User blog comment:ScottyBlue/Tales from Bowlaynee Castle/@comment-5156759-20130206215052

Excellent update, as usual! Very intrigued by that creature in the cave, can't wait to see what it is! Also liked the authoritarian perspective from Lunarah, very nicely written. Grey characters becoming good was never among things I like, but that is just due to personal bias toward the villain and does not in any way take away from your story. The only thing is, I don't really see any chance of the vermin winning; the good guys have birds watching at all times, an impenetrable fortress, and the vermin just don't seem adept at fighting. Unless you of course have already realized this and plan to use that, I think it would be better if you had a fight that the vermin won so they wouldn't appear completely inept.