User blog comment:Peony Laminar/Peony Laminar/@comment-From the South/@comment-1884658-20100509030510

Stop posting the sneak peeks! You're driving me insane! Here are my evil critiques.

"A Dreadful business, slavery." Should "dreadful" be capitalized?

"General Purslane’s immensely fond of her, says she the best young officer on the mountain." Should be "she's."

"Captain Twyblade’s son is in her patrol as well." I think it's "Twayblade's."

"Perigord and Twyblade?"^^

Skipper pulled out his own knife from his belt and used the two to scale the wall. He already has his knife out.

''“Skipper. I’ve got half a mind to throw you out the window after all!” she scolded, beaming at him through her tears.'' Do you mean "Skipper," with a comma?

It was a Miracle that the roof caving in hadn’t harmed it either. Should "miracle" be capatilized?

Skipper ran a paw along the beautiful inlays along the top depicting a mouse battling a Wildcat. Should "wildcat" be capitalized?

The Great Wildcat War: a War for an Independent Mossflower. I think this should be italicized.

"However Gonff and Martin and his companions had a calming influence on him and for the rest of his days he lived in peace and free from madness in the Abbey." Comma after "however?"

"It sounds remarkable familiar." "Remarkably?"