User blog comment:Astar Goldenwing/For Freedom/@comment-1427879-20131119000540

Oh my goodness. I'm so sorry that I took so long to read and comment on this! I have no legit excuse besides life, especially NaNoWriMo. I noticed a few grammatical errors near the beginning of the chapter, mostly missing words, but it was much better as it went on.

I liked this update. The descriptions were really good. I like how there are realistic consequences of war (missing ears and lost voices) and how Triss sometimes stresses over Shogg but still comforts Simon. Nice transition update, Astar! Keep up the good work!