User blog comment:Simu Cooper/Cluny the Scourge (Prologue)/@comment-1988904-20100924042946

A great beginning. Your writing style is very sophisticated; it's a real pleasure to read.

It's always fun throwing in some Juska tribe as the vermin group isn't it? Chronologically speaking, when does this take place? I'm assuming the story itself takes place before Redwall. Is the prologue at some indeterminate time?

The pine marten "vaporizing" -- not sure about the chose of word -- in the camp sounds very mysterious.

The only issue really is formatting. Make sure when you make a new paragraph that you don't indent. Otherwise it'll put your text in those boxes.

I'm in a box!

Also, you don't need to create separate blog entrees for the separate chapters of your story. Just make one blog post and add the chapters on as you go. You can add titles and such to the blog so the chapters are clearly labeled.

Keep it coming (KIC)! Keep it up! (KIU)