User blog comment:AmaidenNamedThymaria/The Clever Tale of Thymaria/@comment-2207385-20110606223408

Wow this is a very unique story so far, thanks to the point of view, heres a few tips, in the begining try introducing yourself completly like saying what creature you are, what you wear, etc makes it easier to picture the protagonsts and other characters, adding descriptive scenery also goes a long way into making a story more alive, and thats it! on a side note let me give a few names you could use for your ship, The Halcyon, SwiftWave, Crimson Flower, Ebonysoul, Hazelwind. Great story so far! Keep it up!

May your blade always strike true and Happystorytelling!!