User blog comment:SalemtheCruel/A little night music/@comment-1677118-20120430073454

Hey Saley! I'm only on chap 9 so far, but I gotta take a break cuz its late.:P anywho, really good opening! I know you started this quite a while ago, but I might as well criticize.(in a good way!) some parts are a little under developed, like how Jangus is suddenly "in love", without simply being attracted at first. And also how he just up and says: " I'm not stupid. I was just pretending." and then it's not elaborated on. They just draw knives, say a few lines, a d make friends. Stuff like that. But, since I'm still so early in the story, I'm guessing that the chars r more developed later.:) I rlly like Drake and Leah so far. I hope she ditches Shemp! Sounds like shrimp fer crying' out loud!;D I'm looking forward to continuing this tomorrow! God bless, Mad Maudie