User blog comment:Akash.B/User blog:Akash.B/@comment-The Forbidden Tale/@comment-1808183-20100215003120

I love the update! I just noticed 4 little things. In chapter 3 Yorgorth says '... loses control of his people. Eighth paragraph starting with the word 'Shruve', 2nd sentence. It just doesn't sound right. 'which was until he began growing old...' I don't know if you meant to say 'until he began growing old'. And the last one was somewhere in chapter 4 or 5 you said 'hands'. I know those are just minor grammatical things, but I just thought I'd let you know. Great descriptions for the characters! you do a great job, and KIC! (Rose Longfletch)