User blog comment:ScottyBlue/Little Flower: A Redwall Story/@comment-4507006-20120611194036

Great update! I was pretty excited!

I spotted a few spelling errors.

Theif: As in boat-theif: Should be spelled thief.

Peircing: Should be piercing.

"The warning came to late" should be too.

Breif: should be brief.

And when Varrin says that Taodar nearly "killed the entire village", I think that it would be better to say that he killed everyone (because a village is an entity and technically not a "living thing").

Or destroyed the entire village...yeah, that would be the best way to put it, in my opinion.

I liked the story overall, you really portrayed emotions well. And the last part as of now is pretty sad. Regret is portrayed beautifully!


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