User blog comment:Burglebuber/Zemmerug's crew/@comment-3148757-20130414200430

Again, I really think you need to make your chapters longer or at least combine them together. That being said; I'm going to have to offer some constructive criticism, however harsh that it may seem: PLEASE don't try to mimic Brian Jacques' plot elements and simplistic character backgrounds. I've found that far too many Redwall fan writers on here attempt to mimic the late BJ (may he rest in peace), and it just comes off to me as being very unoriginal. You don't have to follow his style when you can simply do your own thing!

Give your villains a reason to be evil, and even better; make them see themselves as HEROES, since any antagonist who takes joy in being evil (Well, apart from sadism- that's a whole different story) is unfortunately just one-dimensional. And that's all I have to say for now.