User blog comment:Lathagarr Stormgale/Elm o' the Dale/@comment-1738724-20100927133916

If its a prequel, work on this. Don't write Birchleaf yet, just finish this one first. Remember to make a new paragraph when a different character speaks each time. Mind if critique a bit?

...she took the little one into her lap, "Okay Theemin" thebegan old squirrel... Meant to be a comma after Theemin(is that a name?) and I think its meant to be began the old squirrel instead of thebegan.

I'm not too harsh, am I?