User blog comment:Joseph the Weasel/The Tale of Joseph the weasel, chapter 1/@comment-1630956-20100510204405

a few things, 1) there are a few spelling and grammar errors that can be easily cleaned up if you copy-paste onto Word or somthing like that. 2) you are going way to fast. Slow down and take your time getting from one place to another. You could make at least five chapters out of the plot in this first chapter.

Now for what you did well. I liked the ship log enterances, you don't see much of those in many of the fanfics. Having a good fox added a twist, and shows that you aren't against twisting the Vermin=Evil Woodlanders=good line. He seems to begin to waver in his resolve to conquer Redwall after he sees the nature of the creatures living there. KIC! Oh, and please just add chapters onto the same blog instead of making a new one for each chapter, it makes it easier to go back and review things without changing webpages and things like that. All you need to do is press "Edit" at the top of the page!