User blog comment:Laria Wavedeep/Redwall's Taggerung/@comment-1270315-20100206005511

Nice try for your first story, I do not mean to be rude, but are you trying to copy the book? For your writing I think you need to work on taking it slowly and making it sound a little more connected, the way it sounds to me is that you are exsited and are writing as fast as you can, I did that on my first story and I now am thinking of redoing it. For your story If you search this wiki I think you will find about 10 storys all about otters being taggerungs. I'm sorry.... I would keep writing it if i were you, but make sure to keep it smoth and take it slowly, as any long patrol hare would say, quality over quanity! For your first story good job.