User blog comment:Nightpaw Streamspliter/The Nights Future/@comment-1988904-20100512061418

Great start! The prologue was a bit confusing for me, everything was moving around pretty fast and I didn't realize that Gran was a rat until later. I suppose it's alright you didn't name the stoat and ferret because you killed them off, but maybe you could name Gren earlier becuase I have a feeling she's going to be important later on.

Erva sounds like a great villain! Although the epitaph of Quick doesn't seem to be that that threatening. I was really interesting by the arm scythes, seems to even a bit symbolic or something because scythes are usually associated with the grim reaper. I love when creatures have interesting weapons. You mention that the scythes are tipped with the deadliest poison ever, maybe naming some poison would be more effective. And I think a squirrel house is called a dray, like Russano NoDray

I can't wait to read more. If you have any time, feel free to check out my story as well. It takes place between Marlfox and Taggerung.