User blog comment:Selound/user blog:Selound: My Tua chapter one: Moltgea/@comment-1763658-20100223024900

I like it, it's interesting. You did introduce the villian early in the story.

If you want some contructive criticism, try to write more descriptions, like where exactly did Moltgea come from, how does he talk, what does his clothes look like. That way you'll increase the depth of the story and add more content. Also try to put a backsotry first, like explain what is going on before the vermin show. Lastly, Keep On Writing KIC!