User blog comment:Heather the dragon rider/Defenders of Redwall (old)/@comment-7662967-20160412031708

Ok, here I am at last with a worthwhile comment ;P

First off, DRAGONS! :D Dragons are awesome, I know they aren't 'Redwall' as such, but then neither are horses and magical lynxes and wolves XD

Errol, it is not a good idea to try and take a dragon's treasure. In fact it's one of those well noted fatal mistakes :P I'm not surprised it turned poorly, but I do like how you began the book with it, exciting beginnings are the best :)

Though I'm rather worried both Errol and Randy are dead now .. however I wonder if they aren't. ;D

Also on a minor note, your dialog is pretty good :) (as one small tip, I would not use said so much, but it really doesn't disrupt the flow or anything.) It's just a sort of polishing touch to use more descriptive words, or even use actions as dialog tags. But it's not /needed/ just something I thought I'd point out. Optional. There, that's the word I'm looking for, it's optional XP

I may not comment all the time, but I'll be reading :D KIU XD