User blog comment:Ungatt Fun/The Untold Story of Redtooth: Part 1/@comment-2207385-20120110202904

OHHH that Redtooth sounds interesting and ARGH!!! you had to leave it had a cliffhanger hahaha no worries!! if done right they add such suspense and the desire to keep reading!!, next time try to seperate your paragraphs as they go with the dialoque, makes it easier to read.