User blog comment:Redmight/Knights of Redwall/@comment-3124101-20110627154921

I have no idea why I'm so late at reading this. For some reason, I never got the mail that said the story has been updated. I'm glad I checked, otherwise I would have gotten any Mirth from it. This scene was splendid, and I was really confused, in a good way, before I read it all. Continue crafting this charming piece of artwork, Redmight_sama

BTW, I'm gonna put some punctuations I believe would make the story a little better, if ye don't mind. The correction is in Bold.

“Ha Ha Ha! That sure was a huge BUZZKILL, don’t you think Alanray!”

As the laughter of the two brothers echoed through the forest ; something strange began to happen

a workplace that held an outstanding amount of tools and a backyard with fresh green grass. The home of Raylond and Sunflower could not look more magnificent and peaceful in the morning sun...

In the backyard of Raylond and Sunflower’s home stood two young beasts full of life and joyous splendor: the first one was a cute mouse with golden fur and splendid brown eyes that wore a white plain shirt, his name is Alanray Goldenwood son of Raylond and Sunflower; the other beast was a rat with silky black fur and red-blooded colored eyes that shined not with a cruel soul but with a gentle and serene soul, he wore a plain blue shirt, his name is Skard Goldenwood son of Raylond and Sunflower and brother to Alanray.

Alanray and Skard were both wearing what seemed like planks of wood tight together with ropes, they both carried wooden swords that were inserted in the floor and both of them were laughing their lungs out as they leaned on their little swords. (This one maybe no be a mistake.)

she gave a dance-like twirl and gave a kiss to Skard in his cheek

“Nah, I can’t. mama said to be back home when I was done playing with you both.” she said as she began to run towards her home, “but lets play tomorrow again!”

“Hm? What is it Skard?” (Here ye misspelled Skard's name to Skar

“Well ummm next time we play... can I ummm……….be the hero? I mean if it’s ok with you, I would understand if you don’t wanna….” (This one is not a mistake, put I think it wouls look better. Sorry if it insults ye)

This send Skard into a frenzy of laughter as he rested his own paw on Alanray’s shoulders. They both finally reached the front of their house and removed their “armor” and little swords and rested in the front of the house.

“Hey Skard you really have to teach me how to say such cool things when being the villain how do you come up with that cool stuff?” Alanray said.