User blog comment:Abriella Laterose/Maid's Quest/@comment-3148757-20130706025051

All right; I've skimmed this and it seems like you're off to a good start. But first, I'd like to offer some constructive criticism: First and foremost you REALLY need to split up your paragraphs. No hard feelings intended, I'm just mentioning that because it makes the story easier to read. Secondly... Yes, I know this is more of a nitpick than anything else but feel free to rebut me how you will. What connection does this story have to the canonical Redwall world besides just the setting?

I've seen a lot of Redwall fanfictions where the authors don't really add on to the canon universe, just write their own complete story and with their own characters. Not that there's anything wrong with that, it's just that without the canon locations this could just as easily be written as original fiction. And, well, to me; the point of fanfiction is for canon characters and fanwriter-created ones to interact and generally expand on the preexisting universe, storylines etc. Yes; I know this is a mouthful but if you feel it's necessary feel free to ignore me. Just offering my personal thoughts.