User blog comment:TheMoleOfTheLongPatrol/1st Chapter of Lumetriss/@comment-1427879-20120312214835

There are several spelling and grammar mistakes, moreso in the prologue. The action moves a bit too fast which makes things a bit unclear. Since this is titled Chapter One, it seems as though you plan to make installments of your fanfic in different blog posts. I would advise against that. Simply write the fanfic on a Word document, edit this fanfic to add more to it and fix mistakes and possibly rename it if you need to. I'm guessing the treasure is buried under some dandelions. I'm interested to see what might happen next.