User blog comment:Shieldmaiden/Alanna of Southsward/@comment-988934-20090523152035

Excellent story, full of emotions and detail, the few things, except for one, I could find wrong here are minor and superficial. One question though, how old are the young ones? Bengy was certainly around 10 winters old in Bellmaker judging by how well he spoke, I don't understand how Rook is older than him. Figgs too, isn't she out of toddlerhood by now and at least can talk sentences without baby accents? Just wondering

The backstab of Blackie to Jon is well written too, I myself believed that he was good or him being bad is just an illusion? hmm, can never tell with you, plot twister xD, though it is good to know that at the end, Captain Strapp gets what he deserves.

Also Finbarr's journal entries tell a story of guilt and confusion and the fox part also seems intriguing, I like it very much. Another thing that is very interesting is the sons of Urgan and Gabool, two sons of Mariel, Dandin, and Joesph's worst enemies? More than a coincidence...hmmm.

It's funny how Finbarr is telling Rook the answers against Martin's protest, why couldn't Martin be more like Finbarr and give out direct answers instead of these infuriating riddles.

Another thing which I find funny (well to my mind) is who would be crazy enough to have a babe with already crazy Gabool?

Keep writing, and put me on the list