User blog comment:Nightpaw Streamspliter/The Nights Future/@comment-1738724-20100509000612

When a new creature talks, press enter twice so they start a new line, it makes reading a whole lot easier. And its also a little confusing at the end. And the first sentence you could do this:

Trees were flying; or so it seemed to the middle aged ottermaid.

Other then that and a few other mistakes, its good mate! KIU!